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Reviews for Nonstandard Operating Procedure

By : silkyselkie
  • From ANON - Anon on June 04, 2011
    I'll pre-empt myself by saying I'm not usually a Star Trek fan or OCs, so I feel underqualified to review, but on a post in the forum you mentioned not getting reviews, so I felt kind of compelled to read and comment :)

    There's a lot of good points to your story. Firstly I really admire how you keep Spock in character, he's exactly how I remember him from the original series, and I like how the style of writing reflects his personality and mentality, for example the lack of exclamations add to a sense of calm. The overall style is quite good too, and I only got halfway through chapter one but I'm already compelled to continue once this is typed! The way you set the story up leads to a sense of curiosity about what will happen, such as a 'comfort-bot' that breaks the cliche of 'just sex' and brings in something original and new :)

    The only downside is one or two grammatical errors (starting a sentence with a conjunction is my pet peeve!), and the opening paragraph put me off a lot. If I had just flicked through I might not have continued, just because the sentences seem so short and forced, the pacing of the writing is rather stitled, like part of a sentence is "five days of rest, and not to report", the comma there forces me to pause, it would be better without the comma, the constant pauses distort the pacing.

    Otherwise I do adore it :) I really will go back in a moment to try and read on, because I really am interested in where it leads. I like how you add little snippets to draw in the reader, like hinting at Spock's discomfort without explaining why, because it really does pull the reader into the story.

    Great job!
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  • From Nghtcrwlr on April 25, 2010
    Omg please continue this it's really good! Hope to see more
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