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Reviews for Secrets

By : SpecialFX
  • From ANON - The Fallen Sky on July 10, 2013
    Before I get to the smut, I have a few other comments. First, when exactly is this story set? I suspect it's either sometime in season 3, but it could be season 4. Second, to whom did Clark lose his virginity? For that matter, why did you have him lose his virginity before the events of this story? I get not wanting to have to write Clark as inexperienced, especially if you wanna have him and Chloe do all kinds of "advanced level" sexual things, but I don't really like the idea of Clark as the kind of guy who would hook up with some random girl/woman, even if he was high on redK while in Metropolis. I suppose he could've had sex with Lana, but, from what I've read, that's not the case. I should point out that I'm a Chlarker, so my views are biased on this front, but Clark just isn't the kinda guy to have sex with someone he doesn't love, no matter if he's high or not, and that was proved on the show time and time again. Personally, I think having Clark be "innocent" and Chloe be very inexperienced, save for her one and only time with Jimmy, would make the sex in the story so much more exciting, meaningful and hot, because it would be a journey of discovery for both of them, and the emotional component/connection would be more pronounced and powerful as a result, but that's just my opinion.

    I also have some concerns about what's to come, no pun intended, in the story in terms of the sex. I know this is your story, and you can write what you like, and I'd never say otherwise, but I really hope you're not planning on turning this into some kind of depraved orgy where Chlark are having sex with a number of other people, either together or separately, or even just including one other person in their sexual encounters. As I've said, I'm a Chlarker, and the start of this story sets things up in such a way that this could be a tale of how Chlark's bond grows and strengthens, starting with Clark sharing his secret with Chloe and then progressing to the point that they become more than just best friends, that they become lovers and ultimately soulmates. If you include other people in their sexual experiences, I fear this may devolve into nothing more than a cheap porno, devoid of any real emotional value. Again, this is just my opinion, and you're free to do what you want.

    My concerns aside, I have to say that I very much enjoyed this first chapter. The emotional aspect, specifically the connection between Chlark, was very well done. And the sex... DAYUM!!!!! That was some HOT stuff!!!!! The detail in your description was epic, and the whole sequence flowed so naturally. It was like I was there in the loft, watching them get it on in person! I will admit, I thought Clark cumming on Chloe's face was a bit too porno-ish, but given Chloe's inexperience giving blowjobs, and Clark's enthusiastic response to the pleasure she was giving him, specifically him thrusting into her mouth, causing her to gag and gasp for breath, as his climax hit, along with his concern for her well being, Clark cumming on Chloe's face is perfectly reasonable, not to mention HOT. And while I also thought Chloe wiping Clark's cum off her face with her fingers and then licking them clean was a bit 'porno cliche', I actually found I liked it and found it believable, because she loves him and isn't afraid to do what comes naturally, even if it's a move seen in most every porno ever made. That said, I hope, as they continue their sexual encounter, that we don't see even more classic porn scenarios, like Clark pulling out of her and cumming on her pussy or her breasts or them trying anal so early in their relationship. I'm not against them trying anal at some point, but I don't know of too many people who try it the first time they have sex with someone, and I especially don't think teenagers, Clark in particular, would do something like that. Also, the cum-spraying on Chloe, while I didn't mind the facial this time, I don't think that's the kind of thing Chlark would do on a regular basis. I think, when you love someone and are the kind of people that Chlark are, you would rather keep the cum inside your partner instead of on them. To me, when you cum on someone, it's just about sex. However, when you cum in someone, it's about love, at least when you actually love that someone. In other words, cumming in someone is classy, but cumming on them is kinda trashy. Once again, that's my opinion, but I find the best porn, even in written form, has a lot of class, because it's easy to degrade someone during sex, but treating your partner with respect adds an element of beauty to what otherwise could be very ugly.

    I hope I wasn't too preachy, and I hope you found my feedback helpful. I also hope that you continue this, because it looks promising. Nicely done!
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