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Reviews for Intense

By : idunnoman
  • From pittwitch on June 10, 2014
    I do love my Supernatural PWP and this is good stuff. One thing I'd point out is this passage here:

    Cas could swear that when Dean truly wanted something, those grassy green eyes would darken, emerald irises piercing right through him down to his grace. Dean blinked slowly, his long, dark lashes mesmerizing the angel, making him a puppet in Dean’s capable hands as his head was nudged back. Cas knew that he would do anything that the beautiful, brave man asked of him, whether it was allowing himself to be touched or tearing heaven down.

    This is all Castiel's POV which would be utterly fantastic if the rest were written in Castiel's POV -- but you chose Dean's POV. While I'm sure no one is going to lynch you for the jump, I recommend watching out for stylistic points like that if you're looking to refine your works.
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  • From rae_roberts on June 08, 2014
    Loved the imagery of the wings, and Cas's little humorous comment about boosting Dean's ego. I like the PWP but I also want to respectfully encourage you to consider adding more relationship/romance type material to your stories, I think you'd be great at it and make your fics even better.
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  • From ANON - sabaku_lotus on June 06, 2014
    Oh man is there more? Please tell me there's more! That was....I'm fanning myself over that blowjob.
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