Reviews for Adventures in the Godswood

BY : Valaskia

  • From Dark Ranger on November 07, 2020

    I'm delighted to see you brought this pairing to life. My favorite paragraph is the one where his eyes wonder down across Osha's body. You described it so well for his perspective, a boy so innocent.  

    Something I noticed in the book's dialogue between Osha and Bran is that she often refers to him as "Lordling." So if you want to, you can add that bit of variety to her dialogue here, that way she doesn't keep repeating herself. Just a suggestion. 

    Overall, this was a very fine start. If you decide not to carry this forward, would you be interested in a co-author?

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  • From Oric13 on November 06, 2020

    Good first chapter, Bran and Osha make an interesting pairing.

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