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Reviews for Cumming Out of the Mystical Closet

By : chaluppha
  • From NeoFox on June 26, 2015
    please update this soon
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  • From Bloodredneko on March 12, 2008
    really really good I really enjoy this story cant wait for more it would be kinda kewl is either Paige or Sam got pregnant too but that is just me
    KEEP WRITNG PLEASE
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  • From ANON - Genna on May 05, 2005
    I think this is pretty good for your first fic.

    I would tell you that you might want to tease each description out a little more. When it comes to the sexual scenes you lump all the action into the same sentence: licking, biting, raking, etc. etc. etc. One of the joys of writing is you can stretch it out as long as you want.

    For the content focused action, Piper glared, distrusted, or hated the demon Diamana. You gave the basis for the anger, but you told us she was angry. You didn't give the scene as it unfolded. Piper looked through the Book of Shadows and found a description of the demon Diamana. She found that this demon had the power of 3 all wrapped up in her body. Not only the strength of the demon was implicated but also the demon had the power to charm all women. If Piper wasn't careful the demon could get all the charmed ones without a fight. They might even fall in love with Diamana. Piper looked at the book one last time, "I have to warn my sisters."

    The subject matter itself: finding out you're a lesbian and have to tell your family...difficult stuff. Paige brought the desperation herself. The longer she waited to tell them the inconceivable the more she talked herself into a hole with them. I know all of us delay the uncomfortable but we have to get over it somehow. Paige was aggravating me because she continued to delay and create more conflict in the process. She needs to get a backbone.


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  • From ANON - Mystic on March 18, 2005
    Look This story is great and all,but how about you try this idea.....

    Piper catching them!(Paige and Samara)

    I'm starting to get bored and i just want to see Piper catching them and i wanna read her reaction. So if you don't mind trying to cut back on the sex and put in that idea!

    -_- Ok?
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  • From ANON - Mystic on March 18, 2005
    Look This story is great and all,but how about you try this idea.....

    Piper catching them!(Paige and Samara)

    I'm starting to get bored and i just want to see Piper catching them and i wanna read her reaction. So if you don't mind trying to cut back on the sex and put in that idea!

    -_- Ok?
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  • From ANON - Mystic on March 18, 2005
    Look This story is great and all,but how about you try this idea.....

    Piper catching them!(Paige and Samara)

    I'm starting to get bored and i just want to see Piper catching them and i wanna read her reaction. So if you don't mind trying to cut back on the sex and put in that idea!

    -_- Ok?
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  • From ANON - killisandra on September 11, 2004
    please write some more, I'm dying to know what happens next. I'm not even interested in the sex anymore just the plot of the story... it's well written and i'm enjoying it immensely. good job.
    ~sandra~

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  • From ANON - AJ McKay on January 07, 2004
    Okay, the first thing I noticed while reading your fic was your story format. You can't use script while writing novel style at the same time-this is just tacky. Use either or. If you want a character to speak use dialogue in the form of a novel format and not script. Put the description into the dialogue. Personally, I don't like script at all because you can't feel the emotions of the characters and the plot movement of the story. Your spelling, grammar, and puncuation are hopeless, but they could use a little work. It might help to read the story out loud to yourself before you post if you can't find a Beta for your fiction. You seem to want to learn to write and you've got a good start. Good luck and keep improving. ~AJ McKay
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  • From ANON - Revul on November 03, 2003
    So when are you going to update again? This fic is really good!
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  • From ANON - Tek on October 28, 2003
    Excellent i nearly orgasmed reading this excellent character actions and sex scenes please more soon

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  • From ANON - Ash on October 26, 2003
    I am completely in love with this! Wonderful story line, and character trait use (most fics I've read are too, well...out of character, but not this) and lovely sex scenes. I really do think your perfecting your style in great detail. I would love to read more. Please email me if you update anymore!
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  • From ANON - Revul on October 18, 2003
    Yay!! *dances around the room* she's back!! More soon please!
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  • From ANON - arcticfrostx on October 16, 2003
    Please don't leave us hanging we wanna know what happens next!

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  • From ANON - Revul on October 16, 2003
    Now why do you have to bribe us? Please add more soon, I can't wait to see Piper and Phoebe's reactions to Paige and Samara!
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  • From ANON - Revul on October 14, 2003
    This is really good! Oh, please let them be reunited somehow!!
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