Reviews for Dancing In The DarkBy : Tomy |
I liked the idea that you had for this story. The basic premise is intriguing.
I find myself wondering about Danielle, however. At first, she comes across as a bit of a Mary Sue. Everyone likes her. Even though she's acting oddly from what Bonnie remembers, no one starts questioning her at all until Kitt begins to have a classic jealous reaction to her new place in Michael's life.
When you make her the bad guy, even the villains like her. And the fact that she redeems herself by not killing Michael when she has the chance makes her even more of a Sue archetype.
I would have liked to have seen her character developed a bit more. It was hard for me to fully reconcile her actions and her comments about being in love with Michael without seeing the development of her as a character.
I thought you captured Kitt's jealousy beautifully. His reactions to Michael's continual discussion of Danielle were very believable.
And the way that you have Bonnie showing her maternal instincts towards Kitt is very well portrayed.
I believe this could be a truly wonderful story if I knew the full motivation behind Danielle's actions. I felt that you captured the characters from the show very well, disregarding their reactions to her.
Regardless, thank you for sharing this piece. I enjoyed the read!
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