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Reviews for "Blood Seduction"

By : Slally11
  • From angelsdee on September 06, 2005
    Hello everyone,

    My name is Dee Dee and I am a friend of Slally's. I just wanted to let everyone here know that Slally passed away a few days ago. She had been battling a serious illness for quite some time and finally lost her battle. I have some more of this story saved on my computer that I wanted to post for you but it has not been completed.

    I cannot access her account here so I am going to start another post and title it Blood Seduction II. We at Witchblade Connections are talking about trying to find a writer to finish this story as a memorium for Bonnie. So far I am the only one willing but I have 2 Vin Diesel related fanfics that I must complete first before I give this one a shot. If anyone wishes to collaborate with me please email me and put Slally in the subject header.

    I will try to finish posting this for you by the weekend.
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  • From ANON - Llama on September 02, 2005
    Hmmm... I like, even if I detest the show canon (I am a comic girl myself) but yeah, I lieke this. I do have one gripe I can't stay soilent about any longer )(Will be giving fdetailed feedback when I finish reading) is... formatting. Please., for the love of Michael Turner, use paragraphs. Start one every time someone new speaks. the way you have it now is difficult to read :/
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  • From ANON - Doudelai on July 05, 2005
    Hi Slally,

    I just wanted to tell you that this is one, if not THE one, best written story I have ever read. Your vocabulary is rich and varied and it is just a pure pleasure to read, not to mention the plot twists and the in-depth look at their psyches and love life :) All in all, I am most definitely not complaining. I can't wait to read the rest. And if you have other stories brewing, don't hesitate to post them. I will be first in line!

    Doudelai
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  • From ANON - Demon18 on June 25, 2005
    hi. i honestly have to say that this is the best story i have read on this site so far, i read this story in a day. i am really enjoying it and i hope you continue the story and you update soon.
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  • From ANON - tygertyger on June 13, 2005
    Are you punishing us? It's been so long!!! Please update soon!!
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  • From ANON - Kira on May 15, 2005
    I just love this story!! Please update!!!
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  • From ANON - ccarol on May 15, 2005
    More please! Both of the readers/fans are waiting for your new chapter!
    If some of you want to know what others think about this great story or want to read more Witchblade fanfic,
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    Becoming a member like me and you could read this story in " WB FF NC17 ".
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  • From ANON - Genna on May 14, 2005
    There are a number of things that draw me to your story and made me continue to read it all through Chapter 32.

    I have waited until the end of reading to write a review and have much to say as a result. As an aggregate, your story is well written and compelled me to keep reading. I accepted your story wholesale intially because your story was based on assumptions I shared: Ian could never truly be with Sara unless he was not controlled by Kenneth Irons, Ian has a great deal more depth than the show ever gave him credit (I didn't read the comic book so I don't know how they made the characters; personalities), and Sara might be a part of a police department but in order for her to fulfill her destiny she was going to have to move beyond those confines.

    As the story progressed, certain aspects of Pezzini's personality pushed my hot buttons. She got her way even when there were other point's of view and more people who would be affected by her self centered reality. The second number of times clone was used to mean inhuman or beyond the normal which equated to a reason to disrespect, malign, and degrade Devian. The third had to be the way that Ian's character never had any words to say about the budding relationship between his brother and the love of his life.

    Initially, I was so caught up in the craft of your story telling to object to the features of the story which did not match what I understand about human nature: jealousy and possessiveness are not rational emotions. Nothing in the TV show Witchblade supported the notion that Ian would not trip. Nothing in the way you framed Ian as he moved in the apartment building and took care of Sara's needs made me believe that he would take back seat to any man. Afterall, he let Kenneth die so he could have her. Why would he play second fiddle to a clone bred to replace him?

    After Devian showed himself to be raw and aggressive, he became transformed into a quivering half man whom no one could respect because this woman wouldn't love him. On top of these storylines, Vicki Po lusts after Devian so much that she accepts the brunt of responsibility for pushing him out of the house. The story so completely revolves around Sara that anyone who confronts Sara for being irrational, self centered, or despicable in her actions is written as gently nudging her or forthrightly confronting her 'bitchiness'.

    One of the reasons I liked the portrait of characters that you drew in the beginning was that each character had their own unique perspective and push. Even if they were locked into the same house of out necessity, the world would not stop and become all about one character: Sara. Whether it be what she wants or how she acts, none of us are so gifted as to have the sun and moon rise and set on us. To make fiction interesting, the best stories work from the same principles.

    I can and could accept the notion of 3 people deciding to participate in one relationship living happily ever after. I don't accept the idea that Sara has to stop and ask Vicki or Gabe or anyone else whether she is being wanton or completely hedonistic. This isn't what drives Sara or else she'd be nicer overall by working on her need to please other people. By the same regard she would take a few weeks to ask everyone to pay attention to her needs and make an entire house sit on pins and needles to appease her moodiness.

    Your characters are believe. Some of the things you have the characters doing are hard to believe.

    The sex between character is actually quite good. My personal favorite is all the licking and quivering going on. I have never been a big fan of a woman scratching a man to the point that she draws blood. A woman would have a fit if a man did the same thing to her. I just don't buy it as a sexual device unless the pain giver is a sadist.

    Some of your characterizations changed as you received critique for your readers so Ian spoke to Mobius about his jealousy. I accept that. I had a problem with us being able to see the story through Ian's eyes in the first few chapters then not being exposed to his needs or his thoughts for 20 chapters. It's uneven.

    I probably could say more, but I have spent a week of free time reading this story. I have enjoyed most parts of it. I just didn't think it right for me to read and not to share what I thought as I read or what stood out for me as I think about my journey through my reading.

    Genna
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  • From ANON - Carson on May 13, 2005
    I just love this story!! Thanks so much and keep it going!!
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  • From ANON - kira on May 11, 2005
    OOOhhh, I can't wait to see Kendall get his! Please update!!
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  • From ANON - gypsysiren on May 11, 2005
    Wow, this just gets better and better!! Please update soon.
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  • From ANON - tygertyger on May 07, 2005
    Please update soon! This is killing me.
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  • From ANON - alstonsman on May 07, 2005
    This is a great story! I can't wait to see what happens next; please update!!
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  • From ANON - Morgan on May 02, 2005
    I love this story. Please update!!
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  • From ANON - Sasha on May 01, 2005
    Thank you so much for this story!! I'm enjoying this very much, please update.
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