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Reviews for Seven Minutes in Heaven

By : EveKnight75
  • From GeorgeGlass on April 24, 2019

    That was fun. I loved the whole revenge thing, and the way that their pretend-incest becomes not-so-pretend incest when they decide to keep doing it. That the story ends with them doing it in a janitor's closet at school is a particularly nice touch.


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  • From KStewart on December 28, 2007
    Very well written and tastefully done. I usually don't read stuff with kids in it, but this was quite good, and I think you did a nice job with the characters.
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  • From ANON - Walter205 on January 26, 2007
    Interesting and disturbing at the same time. Ordinarily I wouldn't read Brady Bunch, but you wrote well enough to capture my attention and keep it there until the chapter was finished. Good job.
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  • From ANON - StoryJunkie on December 16, 2006
    That was sweet. You have strange fantasies. but the sweetness is there. and the mischeviousness
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  • From ANON - Diana Lombard on November 16, 2006
    I don't really enjoy reading one-shots or smut, even though I do like sex scenes. I despise reading about sex involving people under 15. But I gave this a chance because you are officially one of my favorite authors.

    This is erotic. Sara Jaye is right. It's tastefully written and realistic as far as most sex fiction on this site goes. Even those who are usually disgusted by the "minor" label would be able to enjoy this. I like the fact that you chose not to enter the janitor's closet and left it to the imagination. For all we know, they might have a simple make-out session and gripe about the unrealistic ideals of perfection they have to live up to thanks to their older siblings (but in simpler words). They might not be having sex in there at all.

    I can easily imagine a pair of 12/13-year-olds making out in a school janitor's closet during class whether it's now or back in the 70's. I don't really want to imagine two people that age having actual sex in a closet. I'd give it 2 or 3 years. For those who are turned on by sex between minors, or don't mind the concept, they can imagine the sex scene for themselves without bothering the rest of us.

    Excuse me while I wait for the vividness of the scene in Lucy's closet during the party to die down.
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  • From ANON - stacey on October 28, 2006
    write more please. i hope peter gets jan pregnant
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  • From ANON - Nympho on September 25, 2006
    Not too shabby, hun. I didn't even realize there was Brady Bunch fandom. You've got me curious now.
    You might consider a bit more build-up prior to the main event. It's the same theory as sex, sometimes ya need a bit more foreplay. Other than that it really was a very well-written story.
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  • From ANON - Grace on December 30, 2005
    AAAAWWW, I love it!
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  • From BlueCrow on December 08, 2005
    Pretty good story. Good build up.
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  • From bow3001 on November 02, 2005
    Looks Good Keep it up
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  • From ANON - HiddenAllusion on October 30, 2005
    Odd, but amusing. I'm pleased I found this... and I'm especially pleased with the grammar. Well-written stories are becoming harder and harder to find recently. Thank you!
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  • From ANON - sweetblood on October 25, 2005
    I've rated this a 5. It is extremely believable, and hot because it is subtle. This episode is one of my favorites, actually. Jan and Peter are two of my favorite characters, as well as one of my favorite pairings, because they look good together and have chemistry.

    The quality of your writing is excellent. That's nearly impossible to find in fanfiction nowadays, and quite refreshing. Keep it up!
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  • From WillowRose on October 21, 2005
    Oh this was a GREAT story!And probably something that was on the minds of anyone who ever watched that damn show.The writing was excellent as well,and I really felt like I was at that party.Good job!!

    wR
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  • From ANON - Sara Jaye, not logged in on October 19, 2005
    I feel a little guilty for having found the sex scene kinda hot...I'm not a fan of underage sex, but you wrote it realistically enough that it didn't turn my stomach. XD This was pretty amusing at points, too, especially Lucy's plan totally failing on her.

    And your characterization of Lucy was...unexpected. My interpretation of her is quite different.
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