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Reviews for Under the Sea

By : SandyJean
  • From ANON - s and s blah on November 18, 2005
    marco is lusting after jimmy thats why he was so depressed sounding when spinner told him that he like jimmy.

    thanks for the entertainment
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  • From ANON - Sarah on November 12, 2005
    Hey this is really good, please update asap ^_^ love ya!
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  • From ANON - ernest on November 11, 2005
    wow that was good i hope to read more soon
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  • From ANON - Jack on November 10, 2005
    UPDATE BEFORE I KILL YOU!
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  • From ANON - John on November 08, 2005
    Wow, another great chapter...but still stop it with the @ and &
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  • From ANON - ??? on November 08, 2005
    OMG....awesome just awesome...but why did you stop there.....more come on more..
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  • From ANON - ??? on November 07, 2005
    great....awesome....i want to read more....so pls...pls...don't take a week to post it
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  • From ANON - john on November 06, 2005
    Hey that was a bit harsh, if you are going to criticise, at least let it be helpful, I am not saying your opinion is wrong, but give helpful pointers and such, it' not that hard.
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  • From ANON - Nubi on November 06, 2005
    ugh that was mediocre at best. Don't you know how to spell out the word 'at' and 'and'. Goodness, you're such an amatuer.
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  • From shadowsora91 on November 06, 2005
    how freaking ironic, I tell about typos and I make a bunch of them -_-...take my advice still!!! :p
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  • From shadowsora91 on November 06, 2005
    Wow, I REALLY like where you are going with this, but here are a few helpful hints.

    1. STOP using the @ sign, it really draws the reader's attention from the story due to the fact...well they think "what the hell?"

    2. you kepp jumoing off of topics from one on to another, you have to just be more careful when starting and ending paragraphs, for example:

    "Marco tentatively licked the tip of Spinner’s penis. While Marco had had sex, he’d never given a blowjob; Dylan was the one that gave him blowjobs. Not that he hadn’t wanted to & offered to, Dylan refused to let him; he claimed something about not wanting to hurt Marco." You see how the first sentecnce is about sex while the next is a rememberance? it didn't fit well.

    and lastly, just fix the small ammount of typos you have, that ALSO draws the reader away from the story.

    PLEASE PLASE PLASE!! DON'T stop writing though! I am just helping out :)
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  • From ANON - kwlguy on November 06, 2005
    hey me again. love the chapter 4. this story is getting really good. im reviewing hoping to read more soon. keep it up im enjoying this
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  • From ANON - kwlguy on November 05, 2005
    hey right on i like it so far i hope theres more. but i think it would be better if you used at instead of the @ sign but other then that right on
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  • From DPuppy on November 04, 2005
    Cliffhanger, that's what this story should be called. *lol* Anyways, it's a cool theme. And smart since you want to keep your readers on edge. I like it a lot!
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  • From ANON - Evil on November 03, 2005
    How dare you stop at that point!

    I want, no, need more!
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