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Reviews for training-camp

By : sarag
  • From ANON - greglover14 on January 01, 2006
    This is a really great story. I love Griss as the Dom. Its hot as hell. Please keep updating!!
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  • From ANON - StarJourneying on December 17, 2005
    Please get a beta reader! I found this short story very hard to read and the flow of the wording choppy. Good beginning though. Keep it up!

    SJ
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  • From ANON - Annabelle on December 16, 2005
    You need to LEARN HOW TO SPELL and use punctuation correctly. Learn how to do these BEFORE
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  • From ANON - Anna Rogers on December 14, 2005
    STOP IT!!!!
    stop leaving it at cliff hangery bits!!

    i think maybe scarfs may have to be involved.
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  • From ANON - Anna Rogers on December 12, 2005
    for some reason that seemed random, but i cant wait for the next chapter, update soon.
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  • From on December 10, 2005
    Good story but you need to use better capitalization and things so it's easier to read. Don't forget to spellcheck. Good beginning though.
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  • From ANON - reviewer on December 10, 2005
    Sssh, if you're going to try to write a story, how about using some capital letters and some punctuation?
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  • From ANON - OnyxNYC on December 10, 2005
    DAMN!!! I smoked a cigarette before during and after that fic!! I still have chills! What a great hot story! I love forceful Grissom and you captured him nicely!!


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  • From ANON - Annie on November 29, 2005
    Hi CSI gsr

    I agree wtih eli this story has graet potrntial,

    I too hate spohie guthatis inly jealosy she is vetter lookung tham me vut i console myself that her chatachtar is such a craw;wr (UK spesak for ass kisser). Cath and sara are better looking tham me but at ;east their charactors are nicer

    I am too much of a coward to allow S&m or BD to happen to me but i can understsnd from reading a lot of the stories on here why it is a satisfying experience for some. Your sex scence was handled well , loved the training and self defnce course,

    Could you not have included Ecklie I would have loved his backsided to vbe booted by any or all of them.

    Well noe griss wonthe sex battle does sara win the fight

    Are you pairing Warrick and cath

    what anout nick and greg are they paireed or sharing the ladies

    Good luck I will tune in and review as time allows

    Annie




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  • From ANON - Eli on November 28, 2005
    It's a good story, your spelling and punctuation can use some reading over. If You need a beta reader for this story or any others, I can be of some assitance. It'll help with the fluidity and grammer and such. Plus it'll get you more readers, because a beta reader can be a HUGE dif in the final draft =). Great story line and such, though. SO much potential!
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