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Reviews for Lizzie's Encounter

By : SexCraver
  • From ANON - THEONE on May 31, 2004
    are you going to make matt have sex with his *SISTER!!!!!* please don't that would be sick

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  • From ANON - HILLARY on May 02, 2004
    LOOK! I HAVE PROOF!
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  • From ANON - Mr.G on April 16, 2004
    It was good write more!
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  • From ANON - butterfly 13 on March 30, 2004
    Before you go off and rip on other people's stories, maybe you should take a look at your own work because I haven't read anything here that is worth reading again.
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  • From ANON - The Bovinator on October 09, 2003
    Okay, your style needs some work. Try more description, more eroticism. Still, I give you credit, this is a lot harder than it looks. Work with the lesbian concept, and work on your style.
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  • From ANON - vv on August 26, 2003
    That was great have Lizzie's mom join them in their sex
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  • From ANON - Lissa on August 23, 2003
    What . . . the . . . frick?
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 23, 2003
    You always must remember to proof-read and spellcheck your work. I'm not sure how you can "humph" each other with "dildoes" in your "clints" but I hope it isn't painful. It would have been a nice fic if it had more detail and a little more realism. Who keeps a dildo in their purse? How could Lizzie (guessing that she's around 14) go into an Adult Video store and buy a video at her age? If do ado add a second chapter, please spellcheck and proof-read. Otherwise, it was pretty good.
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  • From ANON - z on July 21, 2003
    If you meant clit by saying "clint", how can she put anything IN it... maybe you meant cunt?

    You need some work and lots of proofreading.

    -z

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  • From ANON - lissa on July 15, 2003
    very good ! .. i wanna see wut happens with matt !!
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  • From ANON - Meow on July 12, 2003
    Okay, okay, there were many errors with this...but the thing that sticks out in my mind is this: How can having a dildo be proof of being a lesbian? Is that to say that only lesbian women masturbate?
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  • From ANON - GaiaMalfoy on July 09, 2003
    what the fuck is a clint?
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  • From ANON - deadpyro on July 01, 2003
    you could have done better because you werent descriptive at all. okay i guess

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  • From ANON - GoosterBooster on June 17, 2003
    Hmmm... Pretty good... It just has a few kinks in it that you should fix. For example, there are words in the story that have two capital letters like this - MIranda... You should also make the scene more detailed and stuff.. I mean, you should slow down or some.
    Go.
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  • From ambushbug on June 12, 2003
    I have to agree with magenta, this story is poorly developed. there's hardly any plot, no characterization, and several places where proofreading your work would have helped. also, lizzie isn't old enough to even GO into a porn shop, let alone buy something, and it's "clit" not "clint." sorry.
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