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Reviews for Chance Encounter

By : sybersnake
  • From ANON - Erya on December 05, 2008
    I realise this review comes a bit late, but I absolutely *adored* this story and 'Three Rules'. I would really love to see more of this - if you're still writing. Also, out of interest, have you posted these over at LiveJournal? :)

    I thoroughly enjoyed this new twist on what is by far my most favourite 'House' pairing. I didn't actually intend to stay on this site for long - let alone leave a review - but I was very sad to find this story had only two parts and was compelled to beg for more. :P

    *ends prolonged babble*

    Marvellous, *novel* fic!

    *favourites*
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  • From ANON - shinna on December 25, 2006
    This is the 1st House/Tritter story I've read. I really like it. I'm very interested in reading more.
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  • From ANON - Pixi on November 25, 2006
    You've got good bones to work with, but you need a beta to work on spelling and such. There are some misused words, and the grammar is a bit off. But its a good start.

    here's a few things that could use fixing:

    Instead of:

    House stumbled on a garbage and just with difficultly could stayed on his feet, his aching leg complained to him for the sudden movement what it required to stay upward.

    try
    House stumbled on some garbage and with difficultly managed to stay on his feet, his aching leg complaining at the sudden movement that was required to stay upward.

    instead of:

    “Hands on the wall, legs apart.” Tritter ordered coldly, professionally, in spite of the forged charged he pretended to proceed.
    try
    “Hands on the wall, legs apart.” Tritter ordered coldly and professionally, in spite of the forged charges, he then pretended to proceed.

    and instead of:

    House breath quickened from the intimidate touch, but he did not wanted to pull away.

    Try:

    House's breath quickened from the intimate touch, but he did not want to pull away.

    Like I said, just a few suggestions.

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  • From ANON - Nicho on November 23, 2006
    Cool, but the grammer a bit suck, but the story an d the idea brilliant hope to see more
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