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Reviews for Lily's Torture

By : Juvarni
  • From wendi-bnkywuv on September 27, 2008
    Okay. This has been another torture/rape "Hanna Montanna" fic I've read. Why do people seem to be so cruel with this shows characters?

    Stil, I do appreciate you for posting, being daring and blod to accept any hate you might get! Not very long, either. But still good enough for me to review!
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  • From gotc147 on May 21, 2008
    The story has potential, and there was only one grammar mistake I saw, but it's a major one. Whenever a new character begins speaking, you must begin a new paragraph, other than that spelling and grammar was pretty much flawless, that's rare on this site.

    The only other thing is the story is short, could use more detail although I myself can vouch for the fact that adding detail to a good screw can be difficult without simply repeating yourself over and over... But it can use detail in other areas too, such as when they were in the car you could've had Lily wonder where they were going and what he was going to do to her, that's just one example.

    Other than those two things, you've got a solid concept here, keep trying.
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  • From AngelofDeath069 on July 06, 2007
    This story is a bit odd. I liked it though I can't imagine Robby Ray raping Lilly. But it was very well written.
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  • From Gumballs on April 06, 2007
    Its a little short,....
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  • From MW007 on April 04, 2007
    I don't know about this. I know there are no rules, but this doesn't do much for me. Sorry.
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