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Reviews for Dark Angel: What if?

By : supman

From ANON - SandZ on June 02, 2008
I keep getting an idea in my head of Max working as a call girl as this was programmed into her or something (it doesn't make sense to me for her to be perfect in strength. speed, endurance and looking like a supermodel only to have a stupid malfunction like heat cycles- i figured they were designed to make her more agreeable to using sex as a weapon)rather than a delivery girl.
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From ANON - salt on June 01, 2008
Too good for description at the moment.
Update soon!
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From ANON - opin on May 23, 2008
Brilliant! next chapter please!

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From ANON - Franklin on May 16, 2008
oh a ncon story!
reading some other reviews some people might not be into ncon, but i loved it.
hope you continue with this series. theres been alot of strange but great requests so far and I hope too see some of them turn into stories.

seems with each chapter the stories are getting more and more risky. you started with Max/Alec, then went to a heat fic with stranger, and then a ncon story. Maybe the next story could involve some kind of Manticore monster?

hope you update soon!
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From ANON - mary on April 02, 2008
So what will be the next update?
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From ANON - anonymous on March 30, 2008
Dark Angel What if? ideas

Manticore created monsters-not all of them humanoid, xenomorphic sex such as tentacle sex is more unusual than standard noncon.

A sex scene that is also a brutal superhuman kung-fu fight- Maxs rapid healing powers can be an anti-snuff device.

BDSM, Jessica Alba in chains or bondage clothing is a great image in my head.

Max having sex with a guy with electric eel DNA-getting shocked adding to her excitement.

Max getting tied up and ravaged in a web by a guy with spider DNA (think "web of violation" by Jimmy Orthanc).

Sex underwater with a fish guy, Max can hold her breath for longer than a human.

F/F action with another X female in heat.

A freak of the week with mind control abilities turns Max into a servile sex slave.
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From on March 29, 2008
Loved this chapter. Good continuation. Yes I had wondered about that as well.
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From ANON - anon on March 19, 2008
update soon?
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From ANON - Anon on March 01, 2008
Latest chapter was hot, but maybe not as good as some of your other writing. Sadly you probably won't get many reviews since it doesn't involve Alec in anyway...

And if people request ncon stories and you have no problem writing a ncon story i say go for it, i'd have no problem reading it. There's tons of ncon DA stories out there. White seems to caputre and rape Max all the time, hell Max having sex with people while in heat is practically a kind of date rape.

I think there could be alot of more sexual stories to be told within the DA world. Think of all the times Max has gone into heat, during the show she was never able to control herself. Who knows what kind of situations she has willingly put herself in.

As for requests, for me, the first thing that comes to mind is the missing time between season 1 and 2. manticore turned into pushovers in season 2. the big bad enemy of season 1 turned out to be a big let down to me. Max's stay didn't seem that bad, on par with the times she's been arrested by the nomral police. I mean Renfro just trusts that her and Alec have mated? Alec running deals with the guards, Joshua wandering around in the basement doing wahtever he wants. The whole place came off as way to casual for being a super secret miltary base that supposenly creates and brainwashes super solders. IT was definitly not the same manticore Max feared so much. So maybe you could write a chapter where Manticore acts more like the Manticore of old. Maybe they could take a more direct involvement in the 'breeding program.'

Maybe make the breeding program a move scientific endeavor. With all Manticore's scientific knowlege why would they just start pairing up people in hopes of a pregnancy. "You and you, go have sex until your preggers!" it doesn't really make sense, wouldn't manticore have some way to increase the odds. Artificial insemination (Max on somekind of sex machine?) maybe even a sex monster? lol. I mean they seemingly made a freak for every possible situation why not a sex monster?

Anyway, most of these stories seem to aim more to be stroke stories with little plot, just Max getting sex'ed up. But that's okay because I love oto read about that.
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From ANON - anonymous on February 24, 2008
REALLY ROUGH IDEAS
PILOT EPISODE= Cop screws Max bent over table in apartment. Meeting with detective- he wants more money, Max decides to pay him with sex, blow job, missionary, carry around, etc. Breaks into crime bosses mansion, forced to dance and participate in orgy before saving kid and killing boss= blow job to 1 guy while taking from behind by another, cradle while sucking another upside down while placed on table, sex with boss in swimming pool.
HEAT= Basically screwing a lot of people over a large amount of time. Goes into club, grabs random guy, dragged to motel, slapped around, clothes torn off, Max dominant, screwed till guy is out cold and badly injured, shoves him off bed. Goes to get another guy(who says a heat can be satisfied by one guy?) second guy taken against alley wall, suck tits, screwed over dumpster, sex on the street itself until no 2 guy used up as well. Gets 3rd guy, beats him up in a rage, rides him so hard she breaks his pelvis, starts strangling him until fever breaks.
FLUSHED= Sent to prison, gang raped by prisoners and prison guards (it really should have come up on the show with what Max looks like and how vulnerable sha looked)= tied up, 1 guy forces blowjob, 1 sucks and mauls tits, 1 fondles hair, 1 fondles ass, 1 has legs and crotch- 5 in all. Later placed on floor raped 1 at a time, later titfucked, escapes and kills all 5 men.
C.R.E.A.M= Angry at prison ordeal, takes it out on burglar who breaks in to her apartment- femdom, whips, spanking, sodomy(nightstick or equivalent up burglars ass), humiliation, various sick and twisted things from female domination.
411 ON THE DL= Break into mansion, captured, sent off to a sex slave ring, s&m, humiliation,BDSM, anal, mind altering drugs, etc (Max is being programmed into being an obedient little sex slave).
PRODIGY= Imagine that the genetic super kid that the gene therapy scientist is working on is a teenager with unstoppable sex drive, the scientist hopes to quell that drive by having the kid mate with Max, the only female that could survive sex that lasts for hours at a level of strength and energy that would kill humans within minutes.
COLD COMFORT= Max encounters a female transgenic with malfunctioning brain chemistry that causes her to constantly be aroused, can temporarily relieve these urges with sex, attacks and rapes Max. This is different than Prodigy as Max�s partner here is a female (the x5 is bisexual, i haven�t seen many lesbian or bisexual Max fics).
BLAH,ETC= Wanted by police, captured by street gang, bargains for freedom by having sex (1 on1, and multiple) with the entire gang, 20+ members(largest gang bang yet).
RED= Max is ambushed by the red series, they seek to im pregnate her to create new generation of supersoldiers, guess how they do this. Electro, drugs, BDSM.
FEMALE TROUBLE= Rogue scientist captures Max, experiments on and rapes her, dildo, exam fetish, various surgical tools and apparatus use as phallus like objects, ice, electro, anal (rectal exam), sensory overload.
HAVEN= Captured and raped in forest by army of rednecks, various forest related sexual carnage, tied to trees, dunked in streams, etc.
MEOW= Screw guy to death in club in front of eye witnesses, arrested, seduces and kills guards (think Onatopp from Goldeneye), pheromones from Max act like intoxicant.
CASSEROLE= Captured by Manticore- tortured, raped, BDSM, humil, anal, fetish, oral, xeno (forced to have sex with anomalies many not humanoid as well as other x series (acts as Manticores stress relief program), eroto asphyxia(sp?)raped by obscene machines, put in posture outfits like corsets and blindfolds, sensory overload, etc.

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From ANON - sami on February 18, 2008
Wow that was really, really hot. You should deffinately do another episode. You're awsome.
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From ANON - mary on February 12, 2008
are you really gonna write Franklin's request....sorry but I don't think a lot of people would like to read a story about Max being persecuted sexually....Really...who like rape or harsh things like that...

Most of the people who reviewed liked the smut in the first chapter so maybe you shoukd stick with that instead of writing about sexual violence or things like that...

Anyway it's your choice, looking forward to the next update
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From ANON - Amniarix on February 11, 2008
Nice smut, wish i could have seen the episode recently tho, kind of have forgotten all the lead up stuff.
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From ANON - mary on February 02, 2008
Hey when are you going to upadte???
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From ANON - Goz on January 26, 2008
Hi!
I like how you write. Hope there will come more chapters.
If you want you could write a Designate this where Max and Alec actually sleep together. I realize this has been done before, but most isn't very good.

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