Reviews for ButterflyBy : pip |
Chapter 2:
First off, I loved the beginning of the chapter. I think you presented Walter's inner thoughts extremely well, with the same idea as the show presents. I thought it remained perfectly in character (especially Walter's thought process, normal for him, disjointed for others, yet you've weaved it perfectly).
Second, the interaction between Astrid and Walter was enjoyable, too. The show of concern by Walter for Astrid felt like a bit of role reversal from the series (although, I do believe similar things happened, too... I might be a little fuzzy on details). It was a good scene and I love the subtleties in your writing. You're a master wordsmith.
But now it seems things are going to get strange, just like the show!
Chapter 1:
First off, Pippy, thanks for telling me about this. Lol.
Second... The chapter is well written, as I've seen from you, so that's not a surprise. You continue your well chosen words, descriptions, and, even though based off the show, the characters are well written. This chapter feels like it could have been part of the show. Even the attraction between Walter and Astrid, whose chemistry in the show could have gone that way in a different situation, feels natural. You did a wonderful job with it. It's a great start and I definitely look forward to reading through the rest.
Third, as touched on, you have done a great job transferring characters from the show into this story. They don't feel out of character or out of place (and the scenario definitely fits the show). Two thumbs way up for that. And Walter, definitely makes the show and I found him to be one of the best characters, so I certainly look forward to what you do with him and Astrid.
This was EVERYTHING! Finally a mature relationship between Walter and Astrid, I'm so happy I stumbled upon this fic. I absolutely adore the pairing and the way that you write those two is so authentic. I especially loved the last chapter and the intimacy the two shared was written beautifully. Please continue I'd so love to see how the relationship between Walter and Astrid develops.
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