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By : ItwasMerlin

From ANON - confused on July 26, 2015
Why spend so long building up the blackmail if you don't care about it being believable? That makes no sense.
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From ANON - Itwasmerlin on July 26, 2015
To the last reviewer , I just read your long review . Your enthusiasm for a slutty Sarah made me laugh. Wich at this moment due to a few personal problems that are persisting to crop up was well needed.

Do feel free to keep offering your ideas , because there's so many options for Sarah that I don't want to miss any good ones. Don't threat , while I'm not sure how long I'll be , hopefully a few days maybe less but no promises , I do have most of the next chapter written ...... I'm thinking off naming it something like Morgan's law....take from that what you will. I've come to realise some people are only here for Charah and that's fine , I also understand not everyone will find my story beleivable that's fine aswell. I'm glad you get that haha.

Just fyi, I reckon this story takes place late season 3 but in this AU , Ellie and awesome didn't go to doctors without borders , Daniel Shaw ain't coming back etc
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From ANON - Anon on July 26, 2015
About your recent rebuttals...

"I won't be changing it or the direction it's going"...thank you, thank you, thank you!!!

I loved this chapter and the direction of the story and can't wait for what's next.

"...well, I will tell you he'll [Chuck will] end up doing better then you think."... Yay!! The biggest potential downfall, and a concern I also had, addressed. (Now everyone can just shut up about it.)

I don't know what you're going to do or how you're going to go about it but I now have faith you'll be working toward it.

Maybe Sarah ends up with her ass in the air strapped to a turntable in a sex club for anyone to use her holes at Morgan's direction (and she LOVES it) but Chuck's end game in that would be interesting.

(Wouldn't it be nice to see Chuck come in once a month to fuck his ex for free (courtesy of Morgan) and her looking forward to it because she still loves Chuck but can't break free of this sex beast she's turned into!)

Now to the story!...

To the point of some complainers, she's already crossed a line that makes this very unlikely to end up as any kind of Charah story. And as much as I ship them, that's fine by me! I'm glad you like the "weird pairing".

I loved how you've started down the path of Sarah turning into exactly what Morgan described: begging for Morgan's cock and dropping her panties for him at every opportunity (hopefully in places where there's a risk of them getting caught; and then having to service various people to buy their silence... believability is not my chief concern here! ;))

I loved that she was enjoying him eating her out, despite herself. Morgan seems to like going down on her (or like that he can draw out genuine pleasure from her despite the blackmail) so I hope he drives her to orgasm after orgasm and it will turn into something she begs for.

But I guess that's not the most submissive approach so I'm curious how/if you incorporate it. I also like that Sarah walks into and out of the room as the "capable agent" but IN the room showed signs of eventually turning into the fuck toy slave behind closed doors (if you take it that far - please do!)

She CAN be both.

I also like that Morgan is pretty well endowed to the point that Sarah thinks he's big even with her seductress/iffy past. (Yes, Chucksters we get that the seductress thing is a stretch for Sarah and the show. But here it has been declared. Move on. ... That said, maybe we find out just how much Sarah secretly enjoyed "taking one for the team" during her spy career?!)

Does Morgan have a real girlfriend (Alex?!) at this point? It would be interesting if the gf gained control of Morgan's new "toy". Or, I mentioned in an earlier review, Carina could fill that role!

If Alex is around, I'll reiterate that I wouldn't mind seeing Chuck and Morgan end up essentially trading Sarah for Alex as it progresses... Just saying.

I loved Sarah just slightly enjoying the pleasure of Morgan ramming up into her and then flipping her over and burying his cock in her. She may hate Morgan right now but she's starting to really like his dick! I like that this transformation (wherever it's headed) is happening slowly. You can offer just a hint of her liking it and even though that's enough to turn many away I'm looking forward to seeing that intensify.

Her reaction to the next call/text from Morgan will be interesting. I hope she gets wet wondering what he has in store. Maybe rides Chuck extra hard when she gets home trying to make up for it in some weird way. Maybe tries to get Chuck to stop being quite so sweet all the time and to just "use" her too.

The birth control / protection thing needs to be discussed because Morgan NEEDS to be cumming inside her. Every hole. I want her as addicted to his cum as his cock. Maybe he just checks her file?

Maybe Sarah starts pushing Chuck to ass fuck her (because Morgan gives her fair warning and Chuck would be sure to notice if her tight little ass was suddenly a cock sucking vortex). That might be a nice text from Morgan: "I'm letting you off the hook to spend the night with Chuck... Just don't end the night without him ass fucking you because that's next for you and me... Make him fuck you like I fuck you." If that's why she does it, it forces her to think about Morgan while with Chuck!

Curious to see where this goes and how you involve other characters (Ellie and Carina, and, of course, Casey NEEDS to fuck Sarah) and how Sarah's lust for Morgan and subservience to him evolves.

In addition to F/F and Anal possibilities (see above), your tags also include 3plus. I can't wait to see how you incorporate those elements!

Anyone who doesn't like it, yet continues to read it, can hardly blame you (the writer) for their choice. Those of us who deliberately visited the adult site looking for porn fanfic appreciate your efforts. Some people seem to have wandered in the wrong door.

I hope you turn Sarah into Morgan's enthusiastic fuck slut / slave / whore just for fun and the sake of something different!

Now please update soon?! :)

P.S. - thanks for staying the course. It's inspired me to work on something myself, hopefully coming soon!!

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From ANON - Itwasmerlin on July 25, 2015
I'm sorry to the people who don't like the story anymore , or people who don't find it believable etc. I won't be changing it or the direction it's going so I don't need reviews telling me you won't be reading it . I knew some wouldn't like it and that's fine I'm sorry if I've wasted your time . One thing that I will say though , this whole idea that Chuck will end up some sad sack with no backbone , well I will tell you he'll end up doing better then you think.

Thank you to any readers who still like it , and thank you to readers who have stopped , I'm sorry it wasn't for you.

Merlin
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From ANON - stewart on July 25, 2015
Enjoyed the first 4 chapters thought it had great potential. But chapter 5 ruined it for me. She enjoyed cheating on the man she supposedly loves more then anything in the world with his best friend who is also blackmailing her. Utter ridiculous. thanks for the effort you put in but i wont be reading anymore.
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From ANON - madskillz on July 22, 2015
well this story didnt go where i thought it was going. i thought sarah sleeping with morgan was going to be some sort of punishment for her cheating on chuck. but shes already enjoying it with morgan after the first time, doesnt seem much like a punishment if shes getting pleasure and enjoyment out of it. can already see where this story is going now, she keeps enjoying it, chuck eventually finds out and probably forgives her or she just stays with morgan even though he was blackmailing her. think you went the wrong direction with this story to be honest but ill keep checking it out to see if it improves.
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From ANON - Katie B on July 21, 2015
After reading this story and the reviews this morning, I can understand the frustrations some of the reviewers are having. I know it's your story to write how you want and i appreciate the hard work you put into it, But some things just don't make sense. But the last review from confused is what made me read this again and look at it in a new light.

Chuck will always be her main priority, obviously not if she goes out and sleeps with marks for the job. She obviously put the job above Chuck which to me means the job is more important then Chuck. To be honest i'm struggling to see where it shows she actually cares about Chuck. She obviously doesn't think highly of him in bed because she speaks of that in a negative way. She cheats behind his back with multiple people, How does this show she cares? And going off your tags for the story a female will be involved, Which will probably be Ellie knowing Morgan. The truth always comes out eventually, Does she realise the damage that will do to Chuck when he finds out that the person he loves most in the world is sleeping with his best friend? And for how Morgan is the biggest she's had was that really necessary? It seems to me she's praising Morgan and that she's actually impressed, whilst demeaning chuck any chance she can get.

Now onto the matter of her being dominated. As a woman I can agree with this to some degree. I love the slow lovemaking I share with my boyfriend but when we both are feeling a bit wild we like to get a little rough. But that is only with my boyfriend, somebody whom i'm, attracted to and care about. With anybody else it would just make me physically sick to my stomach.

You say Sarah liked being used. Hasn't she been used her whole life? From her father to Bryce to the CIA? She's tired of being used, that's why she loves Chuck so much cause he doesn't treat her like that. You also say Sarah is always in control, even with sex. I agree that outside of missions she would be in control, but on a mission where she has to sleep with a terrorist for example, she wouldn't be in control. A terrorist would be a powerful man who is used to getting his own way, the sex would be all about him and no pleasure for the woman he is sleeping with. So he would be dominating her to do his bidding, a lot more controlling and dominating then Morgan Grimes ever could be. So if she didn't enjoy it then why would she with Morgan?

You spend the first four chapters saying how much she hates Morgan, then after one night with him shes enjoying it. Talk about one extreme to the other. Why isn't she trying to work out a plan to stop him? Steal his laptop or something, wouldnt it be worth the risk of being caught so she didnt have to sleep with him again? Why is she just going along blindly with it and doing nothing to stop it?

Hopefully in the upcoming chapters you actually show Sarah feeling guilty and actually caring about Chuck because there has been a complete lack of it so far. Now I do like the story, it's just that so many things contradict one another. Many people won't agree with me, they think adult stories are just about the sex. True in some respects but the sex is only happening because of the plotline you included, so to me that makes it important in this story. Without the plotline there is no sex. Anyway i'm looking forward to see where you take this in future chapters, especially how Chuck finds out and such but i think that might be a few chapters away yet.
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From ANON - confused on July 21, 2015
You said this in one of your review comments

"Chuck will always be her main priority, so she'll go through with it only to hate herself even more afterwards"

If you really are trying to reinforce that she is only doing it to stay with Chuck why do you spend so much time bigging up Morgan whilst bringing down Chuck? You mentioned her sex life with Chuck in a negative way, you make it so Morgan is the biggest she has had when there is no need to do it. You have her enjoying the sex the very first time they do it. I love the premise, I just don't like the subtle Chuck bashing you put in whilst trying to say that Sarah is doing this all for Chuck, it just doesn't ring true.

I honestly think that is the problem people (the ones who criticize) have with the story, not that Chuck is getting lied to or played, but you belittle his character every chance you can.

You say Sarah (you use the term 'some woman') have a desire to be dominated, yet that doesn't mean they want someone they don't like/care for to blackmail/rape them. Don't simplify her emotions into liking it because she is being dominated. It's more complex than that.

I know this sounds negative, but I actually enjoy the story the Chuck bashing excluded. You spent a lot of effort building up the blackmail aspect, I just plead that you remain true to that premise and keep it realistic in that sense.

Thanks
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From ANON - Anon on July 09, 2015
Please don't give up cause of the more demanding reviewers. Take your time, no one writes full time for adult fanfiction, so who cares how long it takes. I personally don't care if chuck finds out or not, if the story is 100% realism or not. I just enjoy the idea of a cheating Sarah story. Looking forward to the next chapter man :)
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From sjones5 on July 08, 2015
sorry to hear about your personal problems. didnt mean to come across as nasty or that i was criticising to much im just eager to see where this story goes. i didnt know if it was intentional or not with how you wrote sarah making rookie mistakes, so i pointed it out in hopes of you clearing that up, and you did so thanks. now i know you purposefully wrote sarah that way, it makes some things easier to understand, also helps me understand hers and your thought process on the direction of the story. which i like by the way, sorry to make you think i didnt.
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From ANON - Anon on July 07, 2015
Please don't lose motivation for this story. Let the haters hate. I love his story and am desperate to read more. You are exactly right, this is adult fan fiction and the plot is secondary to the sex. I'm here to read about Sarah fucking. I don't care who it's with. Although I prefer it to be heterosexual.
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From ANON - Itwasmerlin on July 07, 2015
I've been having a shit ton of personal problems that's why I go through stages of motivation if you must know . And while I'm grateful for peoples reviews , I'm also tired of trying to defend my PoV of how I see things . If you don't buy it don't read it , want cannon go watch the tv show although that's leaking with plot holes anyway or better yet write a story the way you want it . Adult fan fiction is for stories of the adult variety , fantasy etc . Authors on this site put effort into something wich is free by the way , and it isn't always going to go the way you want it . It's the best I can do , So to anyone who's not pleased by it . Go read something else.....

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From ANON - sjones5 on July 07, 2015
i know sometimes people lose motivation during stories but last time it was 3 months before you updated this story and now its been 5 weeks. eventually people are gonna lose patience and give up on the story cause its not updated often enough. if you lose motivation that often when we are only 5 chapters in, maybe its worth just cutting the story short so we can see some resolution to this story, at least that way it will at least become finished. as you said before you have a lot of things planned for this story but at the rate you update it will be next year at least before its finished maybe longer. not sure i agree with you on the sarah slipping part though, once she was with chuck she became hyper aware and more protective, so she didnt lose him, if anything she became better at her job.
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From ANON - Itwasmerlin on July 07, 2015
Hello people sorry about the silence , I find I go through stages of motivation with this story . People keep asking about Chuck taking revenge etc . I've said before you'll have to wait and see . I already know how this story will finish , but I don't want to give anything away yet. As for the reviewer commenting on Sarah's password , I won't lie I sometimes cringe at that myself, at the time I was being lazy and didn't think anyone would pay much attention to this story but apparently that changed. As for the bugs , my thoughts on that is Sarah's slipping . She's so caught up in trying to keep Chuck from finding out that's she making ameteur mistakes. She doesn't think he'll both anymore after he already has her trapped so thats why she doesn't check anymore. Hope that clears up my thoughts, and thank you for reading.

If anyone is interested, I'm about half way through the next chapter.
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From sjones5 on July 06, 2015
been thinking of that myself since i read this the other day. if chuck joins in, then he is an idiot if im honest. it would be double pleasure for sarah if chuck joins in, not much of a punishment for multiple accounts of cheating. im curious as to how he finds out, does he find the videos or catch them fucking? pretty grim either way. but when he does find out personally id like for him to just abandon sarah and morgan, completely cut them from his life. hopefully he doesnt join in, as i feel they both need to be taught a lesson.
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