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By : ItwasMerlin

From KnightRider on June 01, 2015
Wow hey anon you a little mad buddy. I've never seen anybody get this upset over a sex story and It's a little sad. I'm not even going to continue this argument. I don't want you to hurt yourself.

Hey Merlin you should have Sarah enjoy the fuck out of it to mess with anon. He may kill something though so proceed with caution.
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From ANON - Anon on June 01, 2015
ChuckIsAwesome stop with the cheerleading, jesus christ.

You say this:

" He obviously doesn't understand this is a porn fic and it's written to be hot not realistic. This story stopped being realistic when Sarah cheated on Chuck and Morgan went after Chuck's girl."

That is complete bullshit. If he didn't want the story to be realistic he wouldn't of spent time setting up the blackmail, he wouldn't of spent time explaining WHY and HOW Sarah got blackmailed. You are completely simplifying your whole argument by implying that a story OUTSIDE of canon or in a AU cannot be realistic. There are 1000s of writers who constantly write REALISTIC and BELIEVABLE stories that are COMPLETELY removed from canon, that are completely removed from the INTENDED pairing. So don't try and sit there and suggest that it cannot be realistic. Writers do it all the time, something NOT in canon CAN be realistic. Jesus christ.

The story didn't become unrealistic when Sarah cheated on Chuck. Sarah COULD be blackmailed, Sarah COULD do things she doesn't want to do to remain with Chuck. BUT to have Sarah fuck Morgan once and now start loving it is just pathetic, it goes against the ENTIRE premise of the story, the story is essentially over, the first 4 chapters are now pointless. Why even bother trying to REALISTICALLY explain how Sarah got blackmailed if you're just going to now be unrealistic about it?

"Sarah cheating on "real" Chuck, but that's not the case here because this isn't suppose to represent the show." If nothing else, understand that it doesn't HAVE to represent the show to be realistic, it doesn't HAVE to represent the show to progress naturally, organically. HE SPENT 4 FUCKING CHAPTERS building up the blackmail TRYING TO BE REALISTIC ABOUT THE SCENARIO. Stop excusing the story because you cannot understand how a story can be realistic EVEN while being removed from canon.
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From ANON - Anon on June 01, 2015
Gotta love people trying to police the morality of my anonymously consumed pornography. What the actual fuck?

Definitely "The Blackmail of Sarah Walker." Even if it only began that way and becomes something else.

I loved this chapter. Sarah loves Chuck and I'm sure he's a very sweet lover. But maybe (in escapist porn land) she just wants to get fucked?

I loved that Morgan immediately went down on her until he coaxed a true reaction out of her. Loved that she rode him but got a little more physical pleasure than she expected when he shifted to fuck her. And that instruction to wrap her legs around him was followed suspiciously quickly!

They need to have a birth control discussion so he can cum inside her next time.

Glad you're headed the direction you're heading. Anyone who doesn't like it needs to realize some things about the websites they are visiting...

Looking forward to the next chapter!

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From KnightRider on May 31, 2015
Don't pay attention to the last anon reviewer. He obviously doesn't understand this is a porn fic and it's written to be hot not realistic. This story stopped being realistic when Sarah cheated on Chuck and Morgan went after Chuck's girl. I'll be the first one to admit in the canon when Sarah showed interest in Bryce, Cole, Shaw, or any mark I was pissed for Chuck because that was the show. And there are stories that try to be like the show and have Sarah cheat on Chuck and I get pissed because that feels like "real" Sarah cheating on "real" Chuck, but that's not the case here because this isn't suppose to represent the show. Just like the author said its written to be hot.

Like I said in my last review (and thanks by the way for the shoutout and I'm glad we share the same view on this), this story isn't suppose to be realistic, just like every other story that has other pairings besides Chuck/Sarah aren't realistic. In the show Chuck and Sarah are devoted and in love with each other and wouldn't do these things. These types of stories are written for hot entertainment. Quit taking it so seriously anon.

Anyway that's my rant to anon reviewer. Got your back Merlin, keep on writing hot Sarah stuff.
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From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2015
Well that's me done. You've already made Sarah like it, which is just completely unrealistic, and whether you say Chuck is your favorite or not, you make him look completely pathetic. Good luck.
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From ANON - BigFan on May 31, 2015
Loved it!

I'm OK with Sarah starting to like being used as a whore, but I'd rather her not go searching for it if that makes sense. I mean if she wants it while in the throws of passion as they say, that's fine, maybe even craving it a little on her off-time. But if she becomes a walking whore who wants to be Morgan's sex slave 24/7, then this will be a different story entirely. I would still read it though lol. You're right though, it is your story so write what you want. Can't wait for Morgan to take the gloves off and just out and out use Sarah. Mentioned this before, but I hope Morgan pimps her out to the buy morons :^)

On a side note, I do hope you update not only this story soon, but your others as well: The Most Important Man You'll Never Know, Gaius and His Mind Control Potion.
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From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2015
Love it , hope Sarah becomes More and more into it . Some people won't like it , but if most people are like me and just want to read some hot stories this one is great. Plus Yvonne strahovski is so hot to think about.
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From ANON - BCC1 on May 31, 2015
Loved this latest chapter - I've been waiting for it for quite a while. Loved the setup and then the big night. Theres just something incredibly hot about having Sarah under your control! Really enjoying the premise of your story - there's just so much potential! For me, it all happened and was over too quickly though. When somethings this good, you don't want it to end. I liked that you actually used a chapter to explain the setup as that gave me a bit of depth. Chapter 5 could have been longer though. More descriptions, maybe more time spent on Sarah's strip and on the actual act etc etc.
All in all, I just can't wait for the next chapter. Fingers crossed that you'r not going to bring Reverend Bartowski into the story anytime soon to spoil everything and that the bearded troll gets to play out all of his fantasies with the most beautiful woman in the world!
Thanks for writing this! For now, I am totally and utterly hooked and wish there were more stories like this.
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From KnightRider on May 31, 2015
I wouldn't worry about whether Sarah enjoys it or not like some other reviews say and make a distinction between cheating and blackmail. It's not like a bad guy is forcing Sarah to do this so he doesn't kill Chuck or something. Morgan is blackmailing Sarah because she cheated on Chuck on a mission. Therefore, having sex with someone so they don't tell your partner you cheated on them is in fact cheating. There is no distinction between blackmail and cheating here.

Obviously I'm not into this story for the accuracy to the show or anything. I'm okay with a slutty Sarah who has sex with other people when the story is clearly not trying to be like the show, because Sarah is hot as hell and it's hot to imagine her doing these things sometimes. So I'm good with Sarah starting to enjoy it. But I do think you should have Chuck find out and get with Alex or Carina (or both!). Don't like when Chuck is clueless that his girlfriend is a whore lol.

Curious to see where this goes.
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From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2015
Loving it so far. I don't know what your personal plan is but please don't cave to pressure.

My preference (immediately after saying "don't cave to pressure - eye roll at self) is that as Morgan degrades her more and more and gets more and more bold she actually starts to like it AND wants to keep Chuck. (Obviously that would get complicated and she would want to offer up appeasements that he might eventually accept - cough, Carina, cough - but he would never be all cruel and "revengy" about it. Especially if Chuck has to accept her new lust for Morgan and whatever other activities he gets her into.)

I can understand others drawing the distinction between cheating and blackmail. And I'm trying really hard not to try to sway you the other way. But I'm personally reading for extremes and fantasy and atypical situations. (Not a transcript from a marriage counseling session or a documentary - oops, sorry!)

Glad you took my seduction suggestion from a prior review! Looking forward to the second half of this one...
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From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2015
First part of the seduction looks great, really excited for the next one after two non-sex chapters.
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From ANON - Anon on May 31, 2015
please don't make enjoy the thnings she is 'forced' to do with Morgan, there's a difference between cheating and blackmail. Having her enjoying it is just purely resorting to Chuck bashing
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From ANON - Anon on May 27, 2015
I personally would vote for part 1 Asap, but if you prefer to wait and put them together or you think doing so will improve the story then go right ahead.
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From ANON - Danny on May 26, 2015
Intrigued to see which way you go with this. For me I f you have Sarah enjoying her time with Morgan it's just cheating on chuck. But if she hates every time she has to be with Morgan, it would serve as a punishment. A punishment for lying to him in the first place after being with a mark. If she enjoys her time with Morgan it's like her decision to fuck a mark was justified cause she gets sex on the side as a reward. For me I'd prefer you have Morgan treat her like a whore, he basically forces her to do all kinds of kinky stuff, but she never likes it, she hates it and feels guilty every time, that should teach her a lesson that lying and fucking somebody else it not ok.
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From ANON - Anon on May 26, 2015
I'm cool with three parts (as long as there's "good stuff in each)

Would be nice to see her with Chuck and racked with guilt to start then later subjected to Morgan's plan

But I know you've almost got it written so don't listen to me!

Honestly, don't fall into the trap of rushing to give readers everything you've got right this very instant.
We are never satisfied and it will just burn you out.

Take your time. Break it up. Keep having fun with it so we can enjoy it for many chapters to come, whenever they come
And yes I realize how much I just said "come"
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