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Reviews for The Blackmail of Sarah Walker

By : ItwasMerlin

From mty14 on November 02, 2015
It's basically the exact same idea with a minor tweak here and there. And no, I don't want to see it either.
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From ANON - Dave on November 02, 2015
I don't think mufc87 idea is too similar to the seduction scene. In the seduction scene the only thing Sarah was in control of was picking Morgan up in the bar. When it came to the sex it was mostly Morgan. I can understand why people don't won't that scene but at the same time I do think the idea is different.
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From ANON - It was merlin on November 01, 2015
Thank you for your recent feedback do keep the ideas coming always helps . An update on the next update . My laptop busted , not suprising as it's ancient anyway. But unfortunately I'm unable to get on it and a cess my files . So at this point moment I'm rewriting from memory on my phone the next chapter for this and my Merlin story . Each of them i had at least 4000 words a peice. I'm incredibly annoyed as it makes the process frustrating, I'm also sorry for the even longer waiting period for an update .I won't give up on it though; because even though some don't like it , there must be some who do haha .

Merlin
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From ANON - Derek on November 01, 2015
Maybe whilst chuck and Sarah are on the phone. But whilst on a potentially dangerous mission I'm sure even Morgan is not that stupid.
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From ANON - Luke on November 01, 2015
Yeah liking it. Sarah's in her own little world till she hears gunshots coming through the comms and Casey shouting that Chucks hit. That would make her hate herself and Morgan more then anything after that.
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From ANON - Dave on November 01, 2015
Good story so far.

That idea about being in the van with the comms on is a good one. We know Sarah concentrates when Morgan is doing something to her so she doesn't show any reactions ( well she tries). Cause she's in the zone trying to not let Morgan know she's liking it maybe she misses something Chuck says to her and he ends up getting hurt cause of it and she hates herself even more.
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From ANON - Shane on November 01, 2015
I agree with the earlier reviewer that having another chapter where Sarah has to act like she enjoys it would feel a lot like the first time where she has to seduce him. Maybe a fair bit further into the story, after some of the other things that should happen sooner (anal, other characters etc.) But I agree about a mission that takes chuck out of burbank for a few days, so that the events of the chapter arent bound by either morgan or sarah needing to be somewhere.

Also, just throwing out a completely different idea, but what about a mission that only chuck can complete (due to needing the intersect for something) while Morgan and Sarah are stuck in the van, and it's there that morgan wants to fuck her. Could possibly even have the comms still on so sarah has to talk to chuck while morgan is eating her out or fucking her. Probably a bit on the unbelievable side, but do with it what you want. Hope you have the next chapter done soon!
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From ANON - Guest on October 26, 2015
Hey Merlin

An idea for you to get Sarah and Morgan alone. Chuck needs to visit another city because there is an IT convention. Chuck is there to install and has to stay back to provide tech support. Buymore is sponsoring and installing the equipment. Casey goes with him as muscle to pick and move the equipment(this will also take care of Chuck's security as Casey will be with him). Morgan is not needed since he is the Manager of store plus he was a green shirt before. Do you think it's good?

Merlin if do decide that the idea works for you, make the sex nasty. Divide the whole arc into days...a chapter for each day Chuck is away. This way you can fit more depravity :)

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From ANON - it was merlin on October 22, 2015
as soon as its finished is all i can say anon . Im also working on my two other stories witch ive completely left unfinished because this one took over , so im writing a bit of each in an attempt to get each of them updated . Although this and my Merlin story will probably be updated first . Sorry about the await people .
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From ANON - Anon on October 19, 2015
Update soon?
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From ANON - Anon on October 19, 2015
Dirty is good!

And soon Morgan is going to have an entire porn movie library featuring Sarah fucking him (and others of his choosing, which is even better blackmail material).

No real way out for Sarah except to come clean. Which she should have done in the first place but now the hole is getting deeper!
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From ANON - It was merlin on October 19, 2015
Yeah Sarah's never going to want to fuck Morgan nor will she like him . That just wouldn't fit my Sarah if she seeked him out, because she loves Chuck deeply . But it can't mean she won't enjoy the act in a fucked up way, the story would be horrible to write if she just sat there and took it and wouldn't last very long . And Sarah will most definitely never like Morgan she'll only hate him . That'll be the last time I make that point . But one thing that needs to be said this will be dirty ...lol
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From ANON - Mufc87 on October 19, 2015
What happened between me and mty14 was just a friendly debate. It wasn't malicious or offensive. No one is making you read the reviews or get involved with our views.

So just because I don't like the story means I'm not entitled to comment? Anybody who devotes their time to a story of a programme I like deserves appreciation. Yes I'm not a fan of this story but the next one he writes I might enjoy. He asked for suggestions so I offered one, it doesn't matter if I like the story or not; I just wanted to help a writer out. I don't see the problem with that.
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From mty14 on October 19, 2015
lol. I know you're being deliberately obtuse, but saying that I've been reading since the beginning was to further show that I am committed to enjoying it. It wasn't whatever moronic reasoning you projected onto it that hardly even makes sense in context. And yes, the premise of this story is fairly absurd. Yes I love it and yes I hate bad ideas. I don't see the conflict.

"But maybe dial down the intensity a notch or two"

No? I've given plenty of constructive criticism. Also, LOL at you thinking calling something "repetitive" or "implausible" is harsh criticism. What? Am I being trolled? Maybe I am because next you start talking about how debating is "against the rules" (oh no!!!) after doing nothing but responding to my reviews directly.

And I do want the story to continue :). Nothing I've said has been 'stop writing' or 'give up the story'.

I'm glad, Merlin, that you've said that Sarah will never be feeling anything other than hate toward Morgan, and that she will never fall for him or want him to have sex with her at all. I think that's a good way to handle that aspect of the story.
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From ANON - Anon on October 19, 2015
"I love the story;..."

GREAT! Me too! (By the way, all the quotes are your own words)

"I've been following it since day 1."

Again, me too. No bonus points for you claiming "day 1" status. (SMH at internet "first!" behavior)

"I just hate bad ideas." Fine. But maybe dial down the intensity a notch or two so it's not like you're trying to assume creative control and make the rest of us feel like we have to fight for the story to continue.

Exhibit A: "It's ridiculous. It's not even believable within the confines of this absurd story, which was obviously what I meant."

So... You "love it" but it's "absurd" and you "hate bad ideas"?

Maybe dial it down three notches and focus on the constructive over the "ridiculous", "repetitive", "implausible", "realistic rape reaction", "out of character", "mind numbing" comments (selective sampling of your most recent 4 comments but they aren't out of context).

Maybe four notches. Have your argument with Mufc (who says he DOESNT even LIKE the story yet offers numerous suggestions and also argues pointlessly) elsewhere.

This is a REVIEW board anyway. It's against terms of use to have reader debates on review boards. Just saying.

Merlin? Keep going!
Make it raunchy.
And extreme.
Ignore the few super opinionated mega-"reviewers" out of fifteen THOUSAND hits because you can't please them all.

I wanna continue to see the conflicted Sarah who loves Chuck but is starting to crave Morgan's cock despite despising him and Morgan becoming more and more bold (as you've established thus far).

Please!?!?!

I like the multiple days idea but not sure how to pull it off. Think you need Chuck sent away AND Morgan / Sarah out of Burbank. Dunno how to pull it off.
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