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From ANON - Ehoh on February 03, 2016
You guys aren't looking at it from Chuck's P.O.V though. It's not what (we the readers) see Sarah doing or feeling, Chuck doesn't see that internal conflict like we do. Why would Chuck sleep with her again AFTER what happened in this chapter? He truly believes they want different things from this, that is 100% danger in a purely sexual relationship. You both cannot want different things from it, Chuck should never be sleeping with Sarah given how he feels and keeping in mind what happened at the end of chapter 17. This isn't about what we see internally from Sarah as readers, this is purely how Chuck knows the situation to be.

I'm not saying Sarah isn't confused and completely contradictory in her actions when it comes to 'is it or is it not a fuck buddy relationship?' but that's not the information Chuck has. Nobody seems to be able to explain WHY Chuck would ever sleep with her again given the current situation, it's going to be awkward as fuck.

You all just mention how Sarah is confused, well from Chuck's P.O.V she seemed very clear. Explain to me why Chuck would decide to sleep with her again after this argument in chapter 17. Explain to me why the whole thing isn't going to be entirely awkward from this point forward?

"I think it's important for Sarah to be totally honest--as honest as she can be since I really do think she doesn't truly understand her own heart right now whether it's fear or inexperience--she has to tell Chuck why. Really lay it all out for him. And give him the choice. Either we keep going, or you can walk away."

She's never going to be that open with him, not any time soon. She has clearly just drawn the line in the sand.
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From ANON - Anon on February 02, 2016
Thank you! Please write the next chapter soon don't leave us hanging please.
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From ANON - anonnn on February 02, 2016
I almost enjoy reading the conversations and analysis in the reviews as much as I enjoy reading the story. Ok not almost. But wow. I have written stuff and posted it before but I've never had so many people argue and talk about characterization in the reviews. It's like a legit book club in here. You must be super happy MCP but I also feel like you deserve it. I agree with what PFE has been saying, though. I think MCP has demonstrated the skill to give us things underneath even Sarah's first person narration. She's convinced herself that she only wants and needs a fuck buddy because she's scared (of what we don't know yet and I hope MCP tells us at some point!!) and she's doing her best to convince US of the same thing. But you can read underneath all of that. She cares about Chuck in a much deeper way. Just like the show. Yeah Sarah says they aren't going to be anything more, but you don't actually believe that for a second, even if Chuck does at that moment. But then even after that, he doesn't stop caring.

And I don't like the idea of him looking for something else, either. I think the whole idea of Sarah admitting her feelings because Chuck makes her jealous by running off with someone else is very old hat. I think MCP has more skill than that.

Yes, Chuck wears his emotions on his sleeve. And yes, he wants to protect himself. But also I think it's sort of unfair to try to tell MCP that if they don't write it "this certain way" it will be unrealistic and implausible. That's not cool. At the end of the day, I think it's important for Sarah to be totally honest--as honest as she can be since I really do think she doesn't truly understand her own heart right now whether it's fear or inexperience--she has to tell Chuck why. Really lay it all out for him. And give him the choice. Either we keep going, or you can walk away. If he decides not to walk away in that case, I think it's totally plausible and realistic. What if he isn't looking for a girlfriend? Was he looking for one before Sarah, really? Didn't seem that way. And he didn't seem into the idea of Ellie putting him on a blind date, the whole he's got it for Sarah already thing aside. He was disinterested in the idea of dating, not just the woman Ellie set him up with.

You guys are also forgetting that this story is also about sex. Like PFE said. MCP has even mentioned in their notes that they are trying to explore with writing erotica and this is the vehicle they are using. So while the plot is great and important, just sit back and enjoy the ride. Pun intended. Trust your author a little bit and maybe don't tell them what to do so much. I'm sure MCP knows what they're doing.

Can't wait to see what happens next, MCP!

And whether you follow what the prior reviewers say or not, I'll be here reading and I'm 110 percent sure I'll enjoy it too.
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From ANON - JoeBob on February 02, 2016
I loved this chapter. I'm not sure why anybody is disappointed or surprised. This is exactly Chuck and Sarah from mid Season 1. This is Sarah from Crown Vic. She knew that she was getting to close to him for her own comfort and pushed him away. If you are really going to follow the show, Chuck won't be able to accept the limits on their relationship. He'll go off and look for more. Sarah will see him on a date with Lou from the Deli, lol.

But where ever you take it, I'll be reading.

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From ANON - PFE on February 02, 2016
Also, these points: "...while she feels the way she does...TO CHUCK she isn't just a fuck buddy...he understands she doesn't want that at all..."

I can see why you interpret it that way.

But...subtext.

I think: a) What she says she feels/wants is NOT what she really feels/wants. b) To Sarah he's not just a fuck buddy either but she hasn't admitted it to herself. And c) Chuck shows clearly in this chapter that what he "understands" is that she's hiding and is scared.

I guess I'm just seeing more to Sarah's feelings (and Chuck's perceptions of them), despite what she is saying out loud.

She doth protest too much.

My two cents. Worth less than that.
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From ANON - PFE on February 02, 2016
Ehoh, I'm not "wrong". Nor did I say anyone else was. We just disagree.
Guess we'll see. Ta.
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From Agravain on February 02, 2016
Wonderful as always! I do think Chuck crossed a line but I think it's also the kind of thing I would expect Chuck to do (especially in early seasons) - you did right there. Even if they were dating - you call the police, there's a thousand and one reasons she wouldn't/couldn't pick up (Let alone do anything about it) while she's working or even if she's not!
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From ANON - Ehoh on February 02, 2016
I'm sorry PFE but you're simply wrong.

"I'm so not seeing why this PORN STORY has to accept this as the end of their relationship. "

Because MoreCharahPlease as included an actual plot in his/her story and you can't just turn it off and on when you want and expect people to still buy into it?

"It will sting (mostly afterward) and he'll have to be cautious about keeping his expectations in check but I would NOT give up wild monkey sex with that woman! Even if that's all it was. Not cold turkey at least."

That won't happen, he isn't a robot, the emotions won't just turn off. There will be awkwardness every time they sleep together now. There's no getting past it.

" What's the sense of putting your foot down and demanding something she (says she) doesn't want when you don't have anything better on the horizon?"

It's not about putting his foot down, it's about protecting himself because he KNOWS how he feels. It isn't just sex to him anymore, he should not be fucking her while she feels the way she does. It only leads to his heart being broken. It has nothing to do with him having sex 'on tap'

"Now since it's Chuck, if he had sex with the OTHER girl that might mean it's time to end things with Sarah. But if Sarah is just a fuck buddy..."

But this chapter shows that TO CHUCK she isn't just a fuck buddy, you're missing the point.

" The other way Sarah could realize what she really wants is if Chuck DOES start treating her like just a fuck buddy. No small talk. No sharing. Just fucking."

That would work in terms of opening Sarah's eyes but it still doesn't explain why Chuck is fucking her anymore after this conversation.

" So there's still TONS of ways to have plenty of emotional development and story AND hot sex without just saying its "unsalvageable" so: THE END."

Nobody has said the story isn't salvageable, we said there's no realistic way to explain why Chuck is still having sex with this woman. That's the part that has to end until things change.

You're basically suggesting that Chuck should just get over his feelings because he isn't getting sex from anywhere else. The problem is that Chuck has been shown to be an emotional guy, he clearly has feelings for this woman, he understands she doesn't want that at all, so he wouldn't continue with it.

Once again, nobody is saying it hasn't been perfect, but the line in the sand has now been drawn. Chuck wouldn't realistically sleep with Sarah after this chapter. It's just a fact.
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From ANON - PFE on February 02, 2016
I'm so not seeing why this PORN STORY has to accept this as the end of their relationship. It didn't start out as some sweet, lovey dovey conventional thing. They are fuck buddies with emotions now getting involved. (Chuck hasn't exactly been forthcoming about the fact that he's been hoping for more to develop all along either.)

If I were Chuck I'd be devastated. Totally devastated. But I'm ABSOLUTELY answering that next call. Hell, I'd make the next call! Either way fuck the shit out of her (like she WANTS) and see if she says what he obviously knows is lurking behind her insecurities. It will sting (mostly afterward) and he'll have to be cautious about keeping his expectations in check but I would NOT give up wild monkey sex with that woman! Even if that's all it was. Not cold turkey at least.

What's the sense of putting your foot down and demanding something she (says she) doesn't want when you don't have anything better on the horizon?

He should absolutely date others. As (and if) they come along. There's NEVER been a commitment there other than in his own head. But that doesn't mean he should stop sleeping with Sarah unless that other (not yet happening) relationship becomes serious.

It's dating. (With sex)

To some people, sex implies that the sexual relationship has progressed to the point that you should end the other one(s) but that is NOT a rule of any kind. Now since it's Chuck, if he had sex with the OTHER girl that might mean it's time to end things with Sarah. But if Sarah is just a fuck buddy...

Where it risks getting sticky is if Sarah "dates" someone else. That can't really logically happen. She shouldn't "date" anyone because that's exactly what she's avoiding with Chuck. It would make her a complete hypocrite and Chuck feel like HE was the issue not general relationship issues. (Although I'm sure I'm not the only one who has been through this: helping the person realize their true issues but not the "clean slate" they decide to fix them with. It happens.)

If she screws someone else (maybe to try (and fail) to prove to herself that sex is all it is) I don't think Chuck could handle that. At least not on an ongoing basis. "Shared custody of a booty call" as it were. Or bumping into the other guy carrying his pants or something. But what if Chuck doesn't know?... it could force Sarah to face the truth but it would hurt to read. (And she'll have to tell him later. She's so messed up.)

I suspect Ellie will throw a complicating factor of some kind out there soon. It won't come through Chuck at this stage. But all she has to do is bump into Sarah socially...

The other way Sarah could realize what she really wants is if Chuck DOES start treating her like just a fuck buddy. No small talk. No sharing. Just fucking.

It's not quite as bad as it sounds (even though still unfair to Chuck but even he admits he ALREADY agreed to this from the start) because Sarah knows he cares and she wants to move forward she just doesn't know how. But as it gets even more intense because of what he has to show instead of say she'll go from knowing he cares to wondering if he cares to hoping. And wondering if he is starting to see her as just a fuck buddy. It could be really good and in MCP's hands I know it would be.

If Sarah wants to face her BS, she needs to woman up, bring it up and explain herself. He will be patient about it if she's honest.

If she wants to try to make up for it by being even wilder in the sack, that won't help the situation but I'd be happy to let her put forth the extra effort.

And if she just wants to fuck, why not?!

I don't think that's REALLY the case but really... Why the hell not?

Even if it were a conventional relationship and that last scene was a "breakup fight", it's really not much different than an extended period of not being able to resist the breakup sex.

So there's still TONS of ways to have plenty of emotional development and story AND hot sex without just saying its "unsalvageable" so: THE END.

And though those options aren't what some of us would prefer to do they're NOT entirely unbelievable. I trust the author. It's been perfect so far.

If they do "separate" the real question in my mind is whether Carina is going to ask if she can have a turn now that Sarah is done with him... :)

(Would Carina do that to force Sarah's hand? I think you all know the answer...)

(Phew, see how much I love this story? :) Can't wait to see what direction you take this!)
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From ANON - Wolf on February 02, 2016
Good chapter, I hope you realize that what happened at the end is the end of their relationship though. They can't have sex with what was said at the end there, not until they are in a relationship properly.

Any explanation in trying to explain why Chuck is fucking her after this, makes no sense to me at all
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From ANON - AT90 on February 02, 2016
It's a pretty decent chapter but you've written yourself into a corner here. This is the point where it is 100% clear that they want different things. That means their fuck buddy relationship is over, it's not going to work anymore. What happened at the end is the end of their physical relationship if you want to keep it realistic.

Sarah is being hypocritically because we see her internal thoughts even if she is pretty cold and distant to Chuck everytime there is feelings or emotions involved, yet we know different. Either way, I wouldn't buy them having sex now.

It's too complicated for what their relationship is, you should have them move on to other people at this point. Maybe that will open Sarah's eyes to what she wants, but Chuck shouldn't be having sex with her anymore
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From ANON - null on February 02, 2016
Pretty interesting. I wouldn't mind if the future chapters focused less on the sex and more on everything else.

I hope Chuck actually decides to end this fuck buddy thing with Sarah, clearly they're not on the same page at the moment and he's only going to get more hurt if he continues with it. Maybe it would be a wake up call for Sarah and force her to do some introspection. Whatever happens, I can't see them going back to where they were, not after the talk they had here. If it leads to a (temporary, I assume) break up, then so be it, much healthier that way.
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From ANON - mcp fan on February 02, 2016
I am consistently in love with this story. I've reread through it at least four times. Really. Because there's so much more than sex. And the sex that you've written is extremely hot. I've seen people say they want it harder and less vanilla but I think your sex scenes are perfect. But besides the sex, you have these characters down so well. In so many ways, they're a lot like Chuck and Sarah in the show, and in some ways they're not. But with AUs that happens. They're fleshed out. And I love also this new plot development. I cannot wait to see what this brings. They've actually had a fight, like a real couple, and I wonder if either of them realizes that, especially Sarah. Who has been working hard to keep things unemotional and then woops a fight. Like real couples do. She's obviously going to be broken up about it, because I think differently from some of the other reviewers. Sarah does care a whole lot about Chuck, maybe not love yet, or maybe it is and she's so far out of touch with her own emotions that she doesn't see it you know? So fighting with Chuck and maybe there being a separation for a bit (I assume you are doing this) will make her take a step back and reevaluate and stuff.

The sex at the beginning though. Oh my God. I don't know how people could think this wasn't totally about Chuck for Sarah. She even asked him what he wanted. She woke him up with a blow job. Maybe after this things will be sorted out, or maybe not. All I know is I am really excited to see where you take us, More Charah Please. Thank you for writing the best fic on the entire web!

-your fan
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From ANON - Anon on February 01, 2016
Not mad at ya, something like this had to happen. Definitely still of the opinion (borne out by her own thoughts here) that Sarah is terrified. The last time she felt like this she got burned. And even though Chuck isn't like Bryce, she's afraid of being hurt again. Maybe BECAUSE he's the genuine article she thinks she'll be hurt even worse.

I don't know how many of your readers have met someone like this but it's probably more than even they think; you never realize it at the time...

Which is what Chuck is dealing with. Of course that's not what she SAYS to Chuck. And even though he suspects that she's scared, she's stubbornly sticking to her guns. She's damaged and throwing away something great because of it.

It will be interesting to see what happens next. (As always.) Will she call her fuck buddy? Will he answer? Will he hit it and quit it? How will she feel after THAT?

What excuse will he make for Sarah when Ellie wants to invite her to dinner? What if Ellie and Sarah cross paths and Ellie makes the invitation directly?! Comedy of errors where Sarah shows up at Ellie's ( and hi-jinx ensue)?

Great addition (as usual). Thanks for writing!
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From ERC on February 01, 2016
Wonder what Sara would do if after this fight Chuck decides he no longer wants to be her sex toy I like to see Chuck call Sara's Bluff and end things and see How Sara reacts
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