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By : MoreCharahPlease

From ANON - Anon on September 20, 2015
This story's sex scenes turned me on so much that I grabbed my husband and gave him the best night of his life. Just wanted to let you know. This is some incredibly impressive and HOT writing. I wish all romance novels made me this turned on. I'd read more of them! Wow!
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From ANON - Heemeyer on September 10, 2015
Peelin' back the layers. More sexin'. And now Sarah has officially joined the oral club. Yay! Love it. Looking forward to when these two decide to get serious about their relationship. Or when Sarah gets frisky and decides she wants to watch Chuck bang Carina.
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From ANON - excusemyfrench on September 08, 2015
Thanks for updating!
Still doing a very good job with this story. I like the way the more Sarah gets to know the real Chuck, the kinkier she gets in the bedroom. It shows trust leads to good sex! I know, I'm a hopeless romantic :)
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From ANON - Anon on September 08, 2015
Awesome chapter as usual, absolutely love your writing, very few authors do Charah better. Can't wait for more!

P.S.
I apologize on behalf of us who just want to read your story about the fact that the reviews have become a forum post of arguments, hope it doesn't deter you from writing.
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From ANON - ADA on September 08, 2015
Paragraph by paragraph then:

1) Fine, accepted.

2) Sarcasm and humor often don't translate well. Especially when rooted in the "pulse" of (snarky?) behind the scenes trivia from what? Six years ago? Longer? Yes it was a misfire. Yes it sounded synonymous with pandering. At least you admit it could have appeared as SOMETHING other than intended.

3) "I know it. She knows it." Then why write so damn much about it? You LOOK like you doth protest too much and then complain about someone saying that's what it looks like. "Why the two orders Col. Jessup?!l

Again, impressions. It LOOKS disingenuous. You say it's not? Fine, accepted. Maybe you should have just said that instead of going to war. But don't pretend to be blind to what it looks like. That makes you seem naive.

4) That next one is the doozy:
Let's jump back a few reviews for context: "At least I'm putting an actual MONIKER ... Not hiding behind a mask of anonymity ... You deserve that basic respect"

(Ipso facto - those NOT applying a "moniker" and "hiding" (pfft!) are NOT offering "basic respect"; you said this by implication and I think this position, often forwarded by others as well, is utter garbage)

4) Back to this one: snark, snark, snark.

"mean-spirited and backhanded reviews" oh, the very thing I was (misguidedly) defending your good pal MCP against? So that makes me what? Like, your hero?

Because you are NOT defending the author ad nauseum on THEIR story's review page. Don't even try to characterize it as such. You're defending YOU.

Aside: Or, and this just occurred to me, are you under the impression that I'm the same person who wrote the review you quoted in your first rebuttal? The one who used the "moniker": "don't be like that"?

That's it isn't it? Just because I scanned back to see what you were talking about, read it and had the same impression? And wasn't there another one "named": "wtf" maybe I'm that guy? Oh, man... Well, I guess monikers do have their uses. Am I fighting a fight someone else started? (Laughing now but not at you. And so is that reviewer I imagine. Both of them.)

But I just inserted that aside so back to the point...

I'm DISCOURAGED (see we just can't help the passively aggressive sniping under the guise of civil conversation; ain't it grand?) that you are incapable of seeing that your initial comment would very likely create a certain impression. Or that going on the offensive by overexplaining all the motives that MAY have been in your head at the time rather than saying "my bad, didn't mean it that way" only exacerbates that impression (because I don't have to accept it as fact, it may be revisionist history - however, accepted)

Maybe it's just a hot button of mine but the very mention of a "mask of anonymity" in reference to online "monikers" in all its forms is not just fundamentally self-contradictory.

It's STUPID.

And I don't usually say that to people but it IS a STUPID thing to say.

ITS THE INTERNET.
(Or maybe that really was Anna Kournikova on that dating profile, i guess I should have responded.)

"I'm not questioning your powers of observation; I'm merely remarking upon the paradox of asking a masked man who he is."

I'm not posting my real name on any of the shit I say on the Internet. And if it's not my real name, MONIKER or not, then I'm wearing my "mask of anonymity".

That doesn't mean there's anything inherently disrespectful about not putting a bullshit name on my comments. Nor do I owe that to anyone. If I did the site would demand it. Even then, I could easily create an account solely for trolling. People who in any way degrade the commentary of someone not putting a clever nickname in a box as a sign of "disrespect" just look foolish. And as though they are scrambling for some illusionary ethical high ground.

Yes, disrespect. (You said it by implication. Don't try to be clever with the subtext then hide behind the literal meanings of your words.)

It's bullshit.

Maybe Vicki St. Claire is on your birth certificate but you'd be an exception to the rule. I doubt that MCPs birth certificate says "More Charah Please". Mr. and Mrs. Please may disagree. Perhaps Charah is a family name passed down for generations. Otherwise: MASK OF ANONYMITY ACTIVATE!

Yep, I'm anonymous. (Psst: Alowishus is not my real name). This way I don't have to interact with select people ever again. Or at least Alowishus doesn't. That way a deranged person on the Internet can't troll me later over some bullshit argument we had over masks. And that's why I prefer it. To imply an anonymous status is "hiding" is just sniping at people who choose to interact differently on the Internet. (Trolls included)

Protecting your identity on the Internet is kinda important. I don't HAVE to share my jolly pirate nickname to participate. As cool as my "mask of anonymity" (and its avoid detection plus 4 rating) sounds...it's bullshit.

5) Next paragraph: nope. Done sniping.

6) Final paragraph: finally something we can agree on. And now return this review board to MCP and the excellent work.

Alowishus out.

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From ANON - VSC on September 08, 2015
No, it wasn't damage control or complaining (or even preaching), Alowishus Devadander Abercrombie; it was simply the truth of my intent.

That the creators of Chuck were many times accused of 'fan service', was fairly well known. It was practically an ongoing theme. They often grinned about it and chose to wear it as a badge of honor. I'd hoped that little inside joke was obvious to those with their finger on the pulse of the fandom. I was wrong. It happens a lot. I'm human.

I do find it intriguing, however, that you find the need to pass judgement on the veracity of my 'olive branch'. It really should not have been necessary to begin with. I like this community and most of the writers therein, MoreCharahPlease included. Always have. She knows it.

"That tired "anonymous comments don't count" argument?" Thanks for putting words in my mouth for me. Much appreciated. Not. What shouldn't 'count' are mean-spirited and backhanded reviews with the only intention being to tear someone down behind a mask of anonymity. I'm encouraged that you see that.

But by all means, keep on sniping.

And keep on writing your more mainstream story MoreCharah. This reader sincerely does appreciate your contribution.

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From ANON - Alowishus Devadander Abercrombie on September 08, 2015
There.
I used a "name".
On the mothereffing internet.

That tired "anonymous comments don't count" argument?

Deflect, deflect, deflect.

THAT should be telling you something...

But by all means, keep digging that hole.
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From ANON - Anon on September 08, 2015
You're doing a great job with this story. It keeps peeling back layers to get to something we can kinda foresee but don't know how you're going to take us there. Never apologize for not writing a non-Charah story. Yes, a double-negative! Though I'm sure you could do a non-Charah or any other combination quite well. This one's your best so far and it would be demanding to ask for more than updates to it but I hope you keep on keeping on in either fashion.

It's a good story and good premise. I'm very ok with the underlying story (connecting the porn) being somewhat more 'mainstream'. I like the subtle ways that Sarah seems to be questioning her desire to keep this a purely 'sex buddy' arrangement while also trying to convince herself that's all she wants. All the while their increased bantering and flirting is getting more and more familiar without her realizing. I'm sure it will blow up in her face at some point but I'm ok with it being a slow ride. (Or fast ride, as Sarah seems to prefer.)

High point: "Horngry?" It's easy to forget how clever Sarah is. Nice to see her out dueling Chuck via text. Though he was quite horngry...

Low point: "Like a hot dog in a bun" (uhh, descriptively accurate but not appealing; to be fair, a "cameltoe slide" is amazingly sensual but really hard to describe)

I also like that we DON'T see Chuck's POV. We know him well enough to know that he's not completely satisfied with this arrangement and would love for it to be more. I can't see him dating someone else but I can see him appeasing Ellie and her "fix ups". Though it sounds like he has his hands full trying to woo investors for something that could be big for him. Maybe success there will be a turning point or maybe he will need a "date" for some fancy event (both Sarah accepting and Sarah turning him down and him taking someone else are equally intriguing possibilities) or Sarah may even help him out some other way. I can't help but be hopeful that she now knows where he works...

Thanks for the excellent update!

Not sure I'm buying VSC's damage control but whatever. Maybe it's an olive branch. Maybe it's genuine "oops, I didn't mean it like that." Maybe it's "I didn't expect that backlash". Whatever the case, it's just disappointing to see a WRITER complain that she's being misinterpreted (in two different cases).

When you choose the words and you set the context I don't have much sympathy. There is no misquoting going on here. To be fair, that's a catch-22 to say: "you either meant what I interpreted but if I misinterpreted it then that's a poor reflection on your ability to articulate your thoughts" but...well, there it is. I'll just leave it at that.

I do agree that there are too few writers in this fandom to be tearing any of them down. We just lost one writer due to reader criticism. (Though I've seen much harsher.) I'm not saying to blindly support just anything but pushing your preferences only pushes writers out. You still may not get exactly the story you wanted and instead find yourself wondering why no one has posted any Chuck stories in forever.

Think before you click.
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From ANON - VSC on September 08, 2015
PS - At least I'm putting an actual real moniker on a review and not hiding behind a mask of anonymity. That alone should be telling you something - that at the very minimum you deserve that basic respect.

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From ANON - VSC on September 08, 2015
"But you simultaneously go on a more mainstream story and leave a shitty comment accusing the author of pandering when that story may well be what the author simply seems to WANT to write but also is the very distinction between mainstream and niche. How childish."

Apparently someone thinks I was lashing out at you in my last review, which just goes to show how people sometimes choose to perceive things, either intentionally or unintentionally, and the myriad ways a sentence can be interpreted - like the way a couple of sentences were interpreted in my AN's.

The review was a compliment. There is nothing wrong with 'fan service'. Those aren't vicious or dirty words. Pandering? No, you filled a prompt. Some of your reviewers were asking for something like what you gave us here and you did a good job delivering it. I think it's been a good story. Yes, sometimes an author just wants to write what an author wants to write, but whether you intended it not, you did deliver on some reviewer prompts. Nothing wrong with that, IMO.

It really shouldn't be necessary, but I hope this makes the intent of what was intended to be a light-hearted short review - that someone chose to see as a backhanded swipe - clearer and you didn't feel that way about it yourself.

We're all just trying tell stories here and it does no good for our fan community to be sniping at one another.

Keep on telling your story in whatever way you choose to do it.

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From Mufc87 on September 08, 2015
My favourite chapter so far, and easily your best. Liked Sarah's kinkier side and her thoughts about how she didn't like thinking about chuck out on dates. Can't wait to read more.
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From ANON - Anon on September 08, 2015
Well done!!! Another awesome chapter! I love how they get more comfortable with each other and that includes the banter between them. Thank you for the info about chuck of course I look forward to more!!!!!
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From ANON - CT on September 07, 2015
last 2 chapters have been excellent, good job
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From ANON - VSC on September 07, 2015
Never let it be said that you don't understand the meaning of the words 'fan service'.
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From ERC on September 07, 2015
I hope you continue this story and hopefully write other Chara stories not many authors on this forum seem to like Chara
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