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From ANON - Monty on April 16, 2016
Enjoying your story, the plot and the naughty bits.
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From Jolly on April 12, 2016
Please do not give up on this story. Please do not let the trolls win! As an author you put in a ton of time and effort into �YOUR� story for nothing more the pride. Tell �YOUR� story, �YOUR� way and if the trolls do not like it, they can find a different story to read. Personally, I�m enjoying your AU story on Chuck and Sarah and I�m looking forward to your next Chapter.
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From ANON - Pineapple on April 10, 2016
I love this story. It's by far the best one on this Chuck site. The sex is hot but I'm really enjoying the relationship development and the plot too. Don't listen to the haters. You're an excellent writer, and they're just unhappy trolls. Please keep going!
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From ANON - Anon on April 10, 2016
Well, I liked it. And continue to enjoy the story thoroughly. I'll have to be more mindful of my reviewing since my laziness is somehow being used against you!

I don't mind the approach a bit that Chuck was a willing participant (less than the reader was aware) in "the game" in a story called "Just a Game". He has been all along, right? I accept that he was smart enough to know what she was doing, that she was playing a teasing game more than truly interrogating (since she fully intended to put out), and he had the "confession" in mind (as later explained).

Maybe it was a "fix" but I actually don't think you CHANGED that as a reaction to reviews (or need it) but rather may have emphasized it more than you may have planned. But neither do I think you have to explain yourself no matter what the case.

Either way, I "suggest" (irony acknowledged) that you now ignore all "suggestions" from reviews. Since (if you did modify or add an explanation) it is met with ridicule rather than appreciation. Clearly you can't win with the vocal readers who live to be wet blankets so F them.

And (on the topic of wet blankets) this is the second time I've seen a commenter in this fandom (under different names) claim to have analytical insight into "declines in hits".

Who has so little of a life that they monitor something like that? How would they even have the data available to make that claim unless they personally kept a DAILY check sheet? Rather than accepting the claim, fellow readers, consider the behavior here and draw your own conclusions folks!

Keep on with your excellent story! I support this fandom and those who actually share their work and creativity.
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From ANON - Anon on April 09, 2016
Saw your authors note on your new story. Please don't get discouraged because of a few bad reviews. People who don't leave legitamate constructive reviews shouldn't just post they don't like the story. If there is some specific element of the writing that could be improved then mention it, but there is no value in just bashing the story as a whole. If you don't enjoy it don't read it. That being said I literally check every day to see if a new chapter is up. The story is very enjoyable to read and is a solid mix of plot and sex scenes. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Ehohh on April 09, 2016
You know how critical I've been of certain parts of your story, but I say all that and still enjoy the story as a whole. So let me be the first to tell you that "ha"'s review makes no sense at all. There's nothing wrong with your Author's Notes, you're free to explain yourself and/or your direction of the story before you begin your chapters. The alternative is to post replies to reviews, and that's against the rules. So....

I will say that I found it hilarious how you tried to explain away Sarah using sex as an interrogation tactic (that Chuck 'wanted' to tell her and was in control). I think that's a load of BS and people are always more willing to open up to a person during sex, and are clearly more distracted and less aware of what they're saying. The knowledge that Chuck 'wanted' to tell her after they had sex, looks like the writer trying to explain himself/herself rather than the characters acting naturally. So those parts of this chapter made me laugh, because I could tell it was only there because of what a few of us said about Sarah's actions. I mention it, but it doesn't "ruin" the story for me, I just found it funny. The problem I had with it in chapter 20 was that it was immature and manipulative by Sarah. At some point she needs to trust him, her actions of questioning Chuck during sex, isn't showing that at all.

The sex was good this chapter, as was the more emotional moments from Sarah like I mentioned before. I personally hope you don't get too tied down to the 'case' element in this story, it's good to have it going on in the background, but I hope you don't let it dominate everything else that goes on in the story. It's been used well to get Chuck and Sarah closer together though, it has certainly helped in that way.

I'm not sure where you're going from here but is Carina going to meet Chuck finally? This whole case must be drawing Carina to check up on Sarah sometime in the future, and given Sarah's current dependency on Chuck that seems to be growing, this could make an interesting first impression...much like how Sarah met Ellie haha.

Anyway, overall the story is great. There's been a few WTF moments, but you're writing is excellent.
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From ANON - JoeBob on April 08, 2016
I liked this. On the show, they played Sarah's fear of commitment twice. First in Season Three when she struggled to say ILY. Then again is Season four. That seemed one time too many to me. I think you're taking Sarah at pretty much the right speed. Of course, we'd like to see her have that epiphany moment where is realizes she is in love. But that would be the climax and basically the end of the story. So I'm trying to be patient... like i hope Chuck is. :)

One thing I'm not patient about are the trolls here. Please don't allow one or two jerks to discourage you. In fact, I say delete the HA review.

You're doing great.
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From ANON - ha on April 08, 2016
Notice your hits and reviews have gone down.

Probably because people got tired of your whining and complaining at the beginning of each chapter because you can't take criticism. I wouldn't be surprised if people stopped reading altogether. The way Sarah is using Chuck is really gross. I'd slap her by now. You should just stop writing it because nobody cares about your protagonist.
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From ANON - Ehoh on April 04, 2016
Nice to see Sarah become more aware of the connection her and Chuck share together, my fingers are crossed she doesn't get scared and distance herself/run away from him again
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From ANON - MCPfan on April 04, 2016
Wow! Good chapter! So apparently Sarah's "interrogation" inadvertently fed one of Chuck's fantasies. Nice twist! Also Sarah's walls are dropping more and more which is really cool to see happen. On a more sinister note, I'm starting to get the feeling that Carina's mother's boyfriend may have assaulted Sarah as a child. This would explain so much as to why she's as guarded as she is and why she admits to herself that there's a huge hole that needs filled inside of her. I really enjoy your writing style, keep up the good work!
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From ANON - Anon on April 04, 2016
Thank you for the quick update! The progression in their sexual exploits is great. So is their relationship growth. I'm enjoying this story so much. Thank you! Look forward to more please!
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From ANON - Mufc87 on April 03, 2016
Superb chapter. Amazingly hot sex, and some real heartfelt conversations that seems to bond them together even more. Seems Sarah's walls are crashing down now, hopefully we see them get even closer soon. Can't wait for more.
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From ANON - anon on March 28, 2016
Really really really love this story so much. I've gone through it a few times now and it gets better every time. I really like that they both go headfirst into each sex session. Still using their physical talents to unwind and get rid of tension in this very tense situation. And I love that Sarah's officially put Chuck's safety above her job, when she never would have done that for anyone else before. That says a lot more to me than her actually telling him "I love you". And I think that's what you're going for......at least for right now.

And Chuck knew exactly what he was getting into when she started riding him, trying to get him to tell the truth about whether or not he was a hacker. My guess is that it's something he's subconsciously wanted to tell her. She really didn't have to push very hard to get him to talk. And he did have the upper hand for a bit there. He was just as much in control as she was.

I'm not sure that this scene and Sarah's tactics are as simple as some of the reviewers before me are making it. I saw it as give and take from both sides.

Anyways, this is so good. Can't wait for more!
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From ANON - MCPfan on March 26, 2016
Loved this chapter! I like that she's opening up more o Chuck and trying to get over her fears over her feelings for Chuck. My theory on her secret is she found her mother murdered and that's why her father hugged her when he picked her up from the Millers house. This also explains why she became a cop and is afraid to get close to people. As for her using sex to interrogate Chuck, wives and girlfriends have been doing that forever, lol! Also, on the show she used her sex appeal to try and get information in season five when Chuck had a secret about looking for a house. In other words completely in line with her character. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - JoeBob on March 26, 2016
The job of a fanfic writer is to take the characters from the show, put your own spin on them, yet leave them recognizable.

Sarah had a core conflict on the show. She had a CIA Agent duty to uphold. But she loved this guy. Many times she had to make decisions that weren�t in Chuck�s best interest. And while she never fucked information out of him (8:00 show) she certainly used his feelings for her to get him to do things she wanted. That happened all the time. And finally that core conflict came to a head. Sarah was forced to make a decision. Do her duty and take Chuck to a bunker? Or commit treason and protect him? She came close to choosing the former. But she found that she just couldn�t do it. It was the climax of the show to that date.

I think you have nailed them perfectly here. The Sarah in this story is facing the same dilemma. I predict a similar outcome.

It�s pretty depressing reading the reviews. People who have a problem with this, must have a problem with the show that it�s based on.

So, MCP. Please don�t get discouraged. Give us that romantic scene of Sarah�s walls being broken down and her making that life changing decision.
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