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From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2016
Thank you for the quick update!!! Nice to see them back on the saddle. I loved how Sarah used sex to intergate Chuck! Look forward to more please!
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From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2016
Firstly she didn't say anything, it was an inner-thought.

Secondly your claims of 'sarcasm' are not clear at all, it doesn't read that way. It was a thought mid-sex, it's more likely poorly written/worded than it is Sarah being sarcastic. That or a bad attempt at humor.

Third, she was CLEARLY using sex as a method to get Chuck to tell the 'truth' while he was otherwise occupied. It doesn't matter what Chuck thinks/does during the act, he is enjoying the act for what it is, he has no clear concept to why Sarah is asking the questions until the end when she starts grilling him for answers, I mean he even gets somewhat angry at the end.

So yes, the 'typically' was poorly written, and probably not intended. But it is suggestive, regardless of what you say. Chuck 'taking control' is irrelevant, Sarah was leading the conversation/interrogation. The actual sex isn't the issue, it's the fact that Sarah was using that sex to get information out of Chuck he otherwise wouldn't say. That's the problem.

It's pretty weird for Sarah to do that after MCP spent half the chapter showing how much Sarah cares for Chuck. A person who cares for him wouldn't use something that is meant to be meaningful to obtain information, keeping in mind she is thinking of it as an interrogation during the act (hence the 'typically' part).

I didn't have a huge problem with the chapter overall, but in my mind...Sarah 100% used sex to get Chuck to confess, it's pretty disgusting too, given their 'relationship'.
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From ANON - Anon on March 26, 2016
Sarcasm.

It's a thing.

I'm pretty sure Sarah doesn't use sex to get information out of suspects or witnesses because that's illegal. She was being sarcastic when she said she doesn't TYPICALLY...hence the italics. And both Chuck and Sarah were equally into the sex. She wasn't using him to get information. They were having sex. He took control a few times, even fought back a little. It was hot argument sex.

But whatever. I think MCP has made it pretty clear they're writing what they're gonna write whether the readers like it or not. I happen to think this chapter and all the ones before it were great and if it's really that deplorable to you, good luck reading the other stories on this site. Because thi is easily the best one. And least offensive. With the best char. development.
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From ANON - Anon on March 25, 2016
What the hell? So Sarah makes it a habit of screwing guys to get information out of them?

You spend the first half of the chapter showing how important she views Chuck, and then spend the last section completely destroying that and making her look like a whore. You can't show that connection she feels towards Chuck if you're then just going to make her use sex to get info out of him.
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From ANON - Ehoh on March 25, 2016
Chapter was fantastic up until they had Sex where Sarah basically used Chuck in a disgusting way to get information out him. Instead of being mature and having a conversation with him that explains why she wouldn't get him in trouble, she fucks him and gets information out of him anyway. It's just so cheap. It also wasn't easy to read, in terms of the structure and how it was written.

Also you had her say this:

"his eyes still full of lust in spite of the fact that I was currently interrogating him. Sort of. I didn�t typically fuck the suspects I was interrogating."

...."I didn't typically..." = Which implies that she has fucked suspects before to get information out of them during an "interrogation" which just makes her look worse.

You probably don't agree, but this chapter did a lot of damage to Sarah as a character in my eyes. Hugely disappointing.

I've been critical before, but her 'interrogation' was such a poor decision for this story.
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From ANON - Mufc87 on March 25, 2016
Awesome chapter. Sarah's really opening up and trusting chuck now. And she's starting to think that's chucks hers, that's interesting. Judging by her nightmare, she's definitely suffered something bad in her past, hopefully chuck can help her through that. The sex was hot as always, and chucks confession about being a hacker should make for an interesting conversation in the next chapter. Hope you update as quickly with the next chapter.
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From will30 on March 17, 2016
Enjoying this. Looking forward to updates. Thanks for posting.
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From ANON - Anon on March 17, 2016
I am really interested to see where they go from here. I like this new turn. She hasn't taken the actual plunge into a relationship, but she's trying, inching her way into it. And I love that Chuck is so understanding. I think that fits with canon perfectly. Just like in canon, he sees Sarah's feelings, because he cares enough about her to be observant. He feels it between them, sees it in her face, or in the way she protects him, how she goes above and beyond what a handler is "supposed" to do. But then he also understands that there are things preventing her from acting on those feelings. Whether it's just the fact that she's his handler and he's her asset, or if it's something personally going on with her. And he doesn't ever push in the show. Just like he isn't pushing here. Because he recognizes there's something important there holding her back. So instead of pushing and making her run away, he is gentle and understanding, trying to help her work through it. I don't see what's so wrong about that, especially since it's obvious he's in love with her.

And you make sacrifices for people you love. Nothing weird in that. Especially with type of guy we know Chuck is.

Like others have said, though, there seems to be some underlying psych issues with Sarah, maybe some trauma that has never been appropriately dealt with. That should be interesting going forward. And also the stuff about Chuck maybe being a hacker. He did know quite a bit about how to maneuver through those channels. If he's out-hacking a hacker like Fulcrum, it seems like he's got experience there. Oooohhhh secrets!!!! This will be fun!

Great chapter!
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From ANON - anonymous on March 16, 2016
Full disclosure. I am so obsessed with this story. I've read through all 19 chapters a few times now. I even have it on my phone so that I can just pull it up and read it when waiting for my bus or on the train to work. I sometimes read it AT WORK. Which is really bad. But oh well. Haha.

This is better than all of the erotica novels I've read put together. And now that you're delving into some actual plot with intrigue and Fulcrum attacking Sarah for reasons we still don't know...and the hint that Chuck is more than he lets on..........all of that build up with Chuck not getting a POV in the story, just having it be first person Sarah POV, so that we get as much about him as she does................Wow. Just wow. I tell you what, I've been in Chuck-is-perfect land this whole story. He's so open and has nothing to hide and wears his heart on his sleeve and he's the sweetest and and and and and...... But then with the last few chapters, I'm like holy shit he's hiding something!!! Just like it seems like Sarah is a little bit. Or maybe I'm projecting. But what's he hiding? Does he have some connection to Fulcrum i wonder? like he knows who this person is? IS CHUCK A PROFESSIONAL HACKER?????? Has Sarah been sleeping with a criminal all this time? Whoa whoa whoa! I cannot wait for more!!! I'm going to read this over again.

Also, I really have to agree with Dominic. If something huge happened to Sarah with her parents when she was a kid, as it looks like you're hinting it did, she probably needs professional help. I reeeally like that about her character. Makes the narrator a little unreliable and that's some awesome stuff to pull off with something I thought would just be a simple (good!) sex fan fic. I wonder if you'll have her seek help, or maybe Chuck will nudge her in that direction? If she won't tell him, maybe she can tell someone else?
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From Dominic_Flandry on March 15, 2016
I consider this to be quite possibly the best story I've read on this site. I look forward to reading more. BTW, one thing I do find myself thinking is that just maybe what Sarah ought to realize is that it seems fairly likely that to truly fix herself she just might need some professional help as a guide. The stuff deep in her history that you've hinted at seems like it.
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From ANON - JoeBob on March 15, 2016
I don't get some of the comments. Isn't this exactly Sarah from early S4? She was afraid of commitment. When she finally agreed to have the relationship discussion, she admitted that she was scared. She said she needed to go very slow. But did she go slow? The very next week she told him (while she thought that he was sleeping) that if he proposed, she'd say yes. The job of a fanfic writer is to put a spin on the characters, but still leave them recognizable. So, MCP, I think you have them brilliantly 100% nailed. Anyone who has a problem with this situation, has a problem with the show that it's based upon.

Can't wait to see Sarah's heart melt.
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From ANON - Anon on March 15, 2016
Ok, first of all WOW! I love this story! One question, what happened to Sarah that her Dad had to go pick her up from the Miller's? Your Sarah is actually more open than the show's because she isn't forbidden from being with him. Also like in the show she believes she's too screwed up to be with someone as good as Chuck is. That coupled with her fear of getting hurt again is preventing her from embracing the feelings she's finally acknowledging that she has for Chuck. I don't understand those that think Chuck would walk away from Sarah, I mean think about all the angst from the first three seasons of the show. Chuck loved her and would do anything to make her happy, even if he thought it was her being with Shaw. He'd rather stay friends with her than lose her. Now, everyone's entitled to their opinions and this in mine so please don't think I'm attacking others for theirs. Can't wait for next chapter!
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From ANON - anon on March 15, 2016
Well, they ARE sleeping together still. And it makes sense to me. She readily admitted she has feelings for him. And he understands there's a fear there that's making it difficult for her to commit. I am interested to find out more about what happened to her. I kept picking up on the hints about something with her parents. And going into a relationship with Bryce when she wasn't ready probably doomed their romance before it even started.

Also, it seems like they'll actually be going out together, into public, dating. Even if they aren't labeling it dating. So that is a pretty big step for Sarah.

Keep going, MCP. I love this story! Can't wait to see what happens with Fulcrum. Really interested in that, and also in the steps they're taking together in the relationship! (Also the sex!!!!)
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From ANON - Anon on March 15, 2016
I really dont think this is as a huge step as you are making it out to be. No promises/rules/pressure goes against that for starters and it is also unrealistic. Them wanting different things (which they do) is never going to work in practice, Chuck is gonna keep trying to force the emotions and get his heart broken. They shouldnt be sleeping together anymore, it just doesnt make sense.
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From ANON - PFE on March 14, 2016
I really enjoyed your versions of the "do you love me?" scene a "no secrets, no lies"
:)
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