Reviews for Survival Isn't An OptionBy : Pilgrim |
Please update soon!
I'm sorry that i havent left a comment for a really long time! I want you to know that I come here at least twice a day to check for new chapters, and I get really excited everytime theres a new update. I Love this story!
I actually do not like OC characters, I read your entire story in one night, there is a few mistakes in the writing, but overall I really enjoyed it.
i love how you wrote all of the characters, though Rick is usually one of my favorites, I did not like him in yours. Carol is also one of my favorites and you did not write her in much, while I understand she isn't a main focus I wish you had focused on more of the other characters as well. You made it really seem like belle had tunnel vision for just Daryl, when I think it should have been that she was happy to be with people in general, in the beginning you made it clear that she didn't use her voice while she as on her own, even if she is nervous of being with others she would still want to be around them. The personal isolation she put herself through I can see only enhancing the depression.
Then later, I loved how they did get separated, and she found the old fling, it really showed what her world was like, because he was awful in his hurt feelings exposing her past to her group that had trust in her shaky at best. How the group reacted was over played, rick's wife had been sleeping with two men, to the point she didn't know who's the baby was, I don't think they would have reacted as violently as they had when her past was singled out.
As I said great read I think after your done you should go through it again and rewrite some of the parts. ☺️
Love your story, hoping for a update soon x
Interesting twist! Lookin forward to the next chapter :)
I Love that you let this story take it's time and don't rush forward. Actually, i think i Love everyrhing about this story.
/Josy
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