Reviews for Cries of a ShadowBy : OpenPage |
This is getting even better ! I loved the interaction between Tom and Dennis , my favorite line being "your mother loves it , especially when she's on all fours" LOL. That is funny . But also surprising was seeing Tom in his element . I'll bet Dennis wasn't expecting it . The way you described Tom's attire , I love it ! Thumbs up ! :))
Yet another interesting chapter to this story . I thought I imagined it , but I'm sure now that Tom has self-esteem issues . He seemed guarded and miserable with Dennis . On the other hand , he wanted to enjoy his time with him . But as Dennis said they could be weird together . Lol . While Will continues to worry me . He is acting awfully possessive of Tom, too possessive. Mmm something is definitely going on . Hmmm. Thumbs up !
Ohhh my curiosity is piqued ! This is getting very interesting, . Wiil doesn't want Tom around anyone ? Interesting . This needs close attention . As for Tom showing up to meet with Dennis, I thought for sure he wouldn't show . It took me by surprise to see Tom react to Dennis wanting to know if he was okay. Wow . And then he seems to have self-esteem issues. Hmmm wonder what's going on . So yeah can't wait to see what happens next ! Thumbs up :)
I'm loving it so far . The part where Doug and Dennis are talking is especially funny . I didn't think Doug would notice Dennis looking at Tom and call him out on it . Then when Tom came over and Doug was about to say anything , Dennis interrupts him . Lol . PenHal had Dennis squirming there . Most interesting is Wills introduction . For some reason I don't think I like him . Somethings fishy going . And the cliffhanger ! Ahhh ! Poor Tom.
Ohhh ! The first chapter and I'm already intrigued . I can tell this is gonna be good ! What really got my attention was the way Harry and Doug are portrayed . It's out of character for them . But it works . It's interesting . As for Tom , you have me wondering what has happened to make him act this way . I'm now eagerly awaiting the next chapter . :)
Thumbs up !
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