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Reviews for Africa

By : coheed
  • From Nmad609 on September 27, 2008
    WOW really good story and it has potential for a sequel after they leave africa too! i hope you continue it and emial me when you post a new chapter!!!
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  • From ANON - Arra on January 06, 2007
    Excellent. Update. :D
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  • From ANON - Ari on December 27, 2005
    There is a-gonna be some hot-ass luka/carter jungle sex to-night! *sooollliiiddd* And dude for the record, when feelings are involved in sex it makes it sooo much more hotter and meaningful... *nods* Much love, Ari

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  • From coheed on December 24, 2005
    hey guys! I'm so glad you like the story, and thanks for the reviews! Tygerlily; you are absolutely right about the paragraphs... I have made some changes today, I hope it has made it easier to read, otherwise let me know... I'm almost done with the next chapter, so I'll update soon. Hope you'll like it!
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  • From ANON - Neonex on December 16, 2005
    OMG! Please update this fic. Kovac and Carter are so hot together.
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  • From ANON - Tygerlily [Not Signed In] on December 14, 2005
    Wow, the summary of this story and what I was able to skim through makes this look like a promising read but you really need to break the chapters up into more easier to read paragraphs and giving the dialouge its own separate lines. For example:

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    "Oh Carter. I didn't know you were here, I thought it was empty" Luka said.

    Carter shrugged and shook his head lightly, crossing his legs to hide his arousal.

    "Um no… Sorry Luka... Do you want me to leave?" he said pointing at the door, his eyes locked with Luka's.

    "No that's ok" Luka smiled, fondling his towel.

    Carter blushed and quickly turned around to give Luka some privacy and time to put on his clothes. Carter couldn't look at Luka without giving away how aroused he was by seeing Luka almost naked. Luka grinned to himself because of Carter's blushing. He then removed the towel, putting on some clothes. There was something about Carter, his sensitivity, the blushing, the way his body was all tense, that made Luka kind of aroused. Carter was very handsome, Luka thought to himself; long, slender, muscular, really attractive. Luka grinned to himself; Hell if he'd known that Carter was in there he would have coaxed him into joining him in the shower. It would be platonic of course, but secretly Luka wanted to get a decent look of Carter's body.

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    That's just a small select sample, other than I've been enjoying the story so far.
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  • From ANON - Brit on December 09, 2005
    Looks like a good start: Carter, Luka, Africa. There is nothing more to ask.
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