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Reviews for No Rest for the Wicked

By : Harboe
  • From Keen on November 27, 2008
    Dude. You cannot leave it hanging like that. Something tells me she knows. You have to add another chapter! Quick!
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  • From Keen on September 04, 2008
    I really like the interaction with Dex and Cody. The last lines of the third chapter were cute and unsettling at the same time. Its interesting how you see Dexter interpreting and dealing with common situations with such analysis. Also, I'd really like to see what happens when or if Dexter meets up with this new killer with 'technique' so keep going!
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  • From Savaial on September 04, 2008
    First of all, I want to say BRAVA for tackling the immense subject matter and psychological issues of DEXTER. If any genre required 100% participation, it's this one. He's a complex character and the original Showtime series is very intricately layered.

    Okay, all I can see by way of concrit is basic POV error and comma usage. A trick I use for comma placement is: Write it and read it aloud to yourself. If you stumble, the comma is misplaced. For POV error,just put yourself in the perspective of the main character. The man guy is not going to see the color of his eyes or showcase hair color, etc.

    For example-

    I wanted him dead. He reperesented the worst of humanity, the absolute dregs of society. I thought of this while wiping the sweat from my palms. I always sweated before a killing. My body knew I intended to kill even if my mind became a curious and blessed blank slate.

    That is first person POV.

    In an omniscient POV, the action is related to the reader by the "story teller", who is all-knowing or all seeing in his point of view. Thus-

    He wanted him dead. To Dexter, he represented the worst of humanity, the dregs of society. He thought of these parameters while wiping sweat from his palms. Dexter always sweated before a killing. His body knew he intended to kill, even if his mind became, to him, a blank.

    You have a great grasp of the duality of Dexter. You have a real feel for him. Your imaginative phraseology makes me want to read more.

    Good luck in this work. If you want a POV beta, email me at blackmasamune at aol dot com
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