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Reviews for Taylor's Toys

By : MTL
  • From ANON - kopol on November 16, 2013
    This is one of my favorite stories. I was wondering if you could write similar stories like Katherine/Elena/Bonnie from Vampire Diaries or Brooke/Sam from old show, Popular.
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  • From ANON - WyldCard4 on July 24, 2013
    Hm...

    I'm reasonably sure that the last time I reviewed one of your stories I kind of got you to delete it. Well, um, I'm sorry, especially as you seemed to delete chapters I quite enjoyed (especially Spencer's and Emily's).

    Well, with that glorious track record I'm sure nothing bad can happen if I review this one!

    Seriously, I just watched The OC up to season 3 and, um, Marissa just died. I kind of need a fanfic fix that's not going to spoil anything, and though I may be harsh, I actually really do like a lot of what you have done.

    Firstly, it seems odd that you have Summer and Marissa cheating on Seth and Ryan instead of just set it in one of the MANY periods where they were broken up. Still, The characters on The OC are not exactly known for their loyalty within romantic relationships. Marissa did love Ryan while dating other boys, and Summer kind of dated Zach and Seth at the same time for a while. Given the whole premise of the story is Taylor blackmailing our heroines it's not unreasonable. Nothing seems off about the dialog, and it's really nice to see you fitting in some of Summer's epic body language into the story, such as Summer's scowl.

    I do notice that on a sentence level you have improved over the years, though this is all perfectly fine.

    Ooh, Taylor is BEAUTIFUL. And not just a pretty actress. Her lines are perfect. You have her speech patterns down completely. I love the speech where she reveals her plans involving Summer and Marissa.

    Hm, well I completely buy that Marissa and Summer could be blackmailed by these threats, I'm not completely sure the threats would work quite as well as Taylor hopes. Oh, the school would turn against them and there's be problems for sure, but I suspect Seth and Ryan would forgive them and honestly Taylor wouldn't come off too well for committing a rather serious crime. This is, after all, rape. Sure, fantasy rape involving pretty girls that I'm not taking that seriously, but the, well, rape thing is pretty big. And really, this is Seth and Ryan, they're going to be VERY HURT but they're an understanding couple of guys who are hardly angels themselves.

    Anyway, despite those reservations, the premise does work, I just like to nitpick.

    I really want to emphasize how funny this story is. I'm laughing practically every sentence. Your writing for Summer is simply superb. You're honestly making the characters come alive. I am dead serious. Even without factoring in the smut angle I think this is a delicious fanfic and just what I needed after watching Marissa die. Like, seriously I practically threw up it was such a sad episode.

    It's not just the character writing, either:

    "Marissa and Summer exchanged a smile and then quickly called their parents, who seem perfectly fine with the situation as long as they were just staying with a girl."

    This is wickedly funny and ironic.

    Now we've actually arrived at the sex scene.

    Hm...

    I like how it progresses, taking it slowly, starting with just making out before moving on to the heavier stuff. It also works with the "telling" part of Taylor's plan, which is in character. This is nice, how Taylor really seems to appreciate the girls she's raping, sees them as beautiful, and gets sexually excited by it. The whole thing is quite interesting.

    This might be a bit weird, but it would have been nice to know a bit more about what Summer and Marissa were wearing while making out. I like the detail of skirts, though, and maybe I just missed a clothing detail. Taylor too, actually.

    The undressing scene is extremely erotic, and I just love how it starts progressing once they're actually naked. There's something fascinatingly gentle about these descriptions, and our heroines taking to obedience so rapidly makes the whole thing feel less creepily rapey.

    Hm, this review is already quite long, and we've reached the stage where I'll probably start masturbating soon, so I'll cut off the review here, maybe add in others for other chapters. Anyway, excellent job, and keep up the good work.
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  • From stevemorgan on August 28, 2010
    this ended brilliantly, i really enjoyed it,keep up the good work
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  • From stevemorgan on April 26, 2010
    i cant believe it you get better and better with yourstorys , im not familiar with the characters as ive only seen the first two seasons of o.c casually, but ive really enjoyed this, you always write interesting new characters

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  • From ANON - Anon on April 28, 2009
    Very, VERY sexy new chapter - love it! Please post more asap!
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  • From ANON - remus on November 21, 2008
    great story, taylor being the dominant and marissa and summers her subs wonderful. Get the next story out as fast as you can this cliffhinger too good not to be followed up on time for some bdsm.
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 30, 2008
    Yet another sexy story. I always liked the girls from The O.C. (who doesn't?), so I really enjoyed reading this story. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
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  • From InfamousDX on October 28, 2008
    Whoa is it hot in here or what? Very nice! i've always been a fan of your stories, and this is one of your best ones yet! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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