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Reviews for Two Words: Spock and Tumultuous

By : JohnnynotSid
  • From knappshari on August 16, 2009
    Wow...I'm...speechless.
    There is so much feeling and emotion running through the end of this chapter...god, at the end, even I was disappointed that he couldn't just give her a smile! I am enjoying this so much, please continue the story.
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  • From knappshari on August 16, 2009
    *chuckles appreciatively*

    Wonderful! If the first chapter is anything to go by, I will thoroughly enjoy this fic!

    My favorite line...and I am still giggling as I type this...is "I found it very funny that I had managed to annoy a Vulcan. Unemotional my ass."

    I can just see Spock here, trying to deal with a snarky bride-to-be, and wondering what the HELL he got himself into! LOL

    About the only advice I could give you is to give her dialogue that is a little less...modern...unless parody is what you are going for. A++++
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  • From OktoberBlack on August 07, 2009
    I liked the first chapter better. You seemed to have a better handle on the characters and their voices in the first chapter. Kirk doesn't sound quite right in his dialogue with Spock, IMHO. I'm also not too sure about Spock's voice. It's okay, but I know you can do better! :-)
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  • From OktoberBlack on July 29, 2009
    I'm kind of liking this story. It's a very interesting premise!
    I hope you continue - I want to see where it goes.
    The voice of the main character seems to go in and out of character though, as do the other characters as well. Just something I noticed...
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