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Reviews for The Second Side of a Silver Dollar

By : Siberian
  • From cowgirl65 on April 27, 2011
    I can't be sorry that McGee pulled the trigger. Love the little family
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  • From bloodravyn on April 23, 2011
    i just dropped in to read and loved it all!
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  • From cowgirl65 on April 14, 2011
    glad they found little Benjamin and Tobias (LOL), love how they worked the crime scene and the tie in with Gibbs' revenge for his family
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  • From cowgirl65 on April 07, 2011
    I think Warren's going to be a mite put out LOL
    very hot, definitely worth the wait!
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  • From cowgirl65 on March 31, 2011
    I really like how you portrayed all sides of Gibbs; private, possessive, not showing tender emotion in public but caring and passionate in private

    and the sex was really hot too!!
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  • From cowgirl65 on March 23, 2011
    I was looking forward to Warren being dragged behind a horse LOL

    loved the tender moment between Tim and Gibbs, just the way I'd imagine Gibbs in love with someone
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  • From cowgirl65 on March 19, 2011
    Oh, I really hope they can get to Tim before his father hurts him further. Good for him standing his ground and not giving in to his father, I'm thinking being with the others has changed him. He belongs with the gang, go get him, Gibbs!
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  • From KonekoRain on March 17, 2011
    My goodness, I am in love with this story! I love every aspect of it and am anxiously awaiting the next chapter. =^-^=
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  • From cowgirl65 on March 12, 2011
    As usual, your characterizations are spot on. I really liked the description of Jimmy and Ducky's relationship:

    There were many little things that proved Jimmy’s devotion but in truth his reaction to Ducky’s stories cemented Gibbs’ opinion regarding his sincerity. Only someone in love with Ducky could listen to his stories for five hours straight and manage to hang on to every word.

    I'm not a professional editor, even though I did get paid for it in university. :) But I do a lot of betaing and if you'd like, you can message me on the forums, even though there's not much I can add to your excellent writing

    love the story, keep it coming
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  • From cowgirl65 on March 03, 2011
    I just love Tony's interaction with Kate and I think we're about to see the softer side of Gibbs :)
    Just wanted to mention a few nitpicky grammar things.

    Commas are your friends; I think they are feeling neglected LOL.

    And another little thing that I notice crops up once in a while, some sentences are not actually sentences e.g.'His face felt a little itchy from dirt smudges on his face. The soil getting trapped in the tracks of his tears.' The second is not a sentence. Some ideas:
    'His face felt a little itchy from dirt smudges on his face. The soil was trapped in the tracks of his tears.'
    'His face felt a little itchy from dirt smudges on his face, the soil getting trapped in the tracks of his tears.'
    or better yet and avoiding the comma -ing trap, "His face felt a little itchy from the soil of the dirt smudges that were trapped in the tracks of his tears.' or something along those lines.

    One inconsistency with the time period is the use of the term 'bathroom'. A bathroom in the old west would be a room with a tub. You would do your business in an outhouse or behind a tree or if you were really well off and had some form of indoor plumbing, it would be a water closet. But not something most would notice unless they routinely write or read stuff form the 1870's :)

    Honestly, though, the story is engrossing enough that I'm just noticing these as an aside (the editor in me coming out) and it is certainly NOT affecting my enjoyment of the story. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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  • From cowgirl65 on February 23, 2011
    I love westerns and I love NCIS. You're doing great at adapting the characters to the time period. can't wait for more
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