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Reviews for Bloodlines & Divine Lies

By : LdyKiram
  • From Danyealle on March 11, 2012
    While the plot of the story has promise, there are issues with the writing itself. First, I would strongly suggest finding a beta to look over the work. There are problems with punctuation, sentences that should be divided into more than one, others that need combined and stilted usage that makes it hard to follow what is going on. It does also seem like more of the story is situated around the OCs rather than the canon characters, something, in the shortness of the chapters, gives us no real background to or way to get used to them. A beta could help fix all that. Other than that the story has a great deal of promise!
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