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Reviews for I Remember the Way We Touched

By : WinchesterD82
  • From dreamweaver37 on July 01, 2012
    Wow....trying to find a way to review kindly here. Okay. Here it goes.
    The writing is obviously done by a teenager or maybe VERY early 20's, and most likely a female. Also done very obviously by someone who doesn't have a clue about gay sex. (I'm a gay man, so I like to think I'm an expert, and my partner seems to agree.) It's just..monotonous. I found myself quickly scanning over it to get to the end, because it doesn't hold a persons attention. I mean, bless your heart for wanting to write something that makes a point about gay being okay; that is very sweet, and on behalf of gay men everywhere, the sentiment is appreciated. I would just suggest you A. Educate yourself about gay sex before you try writing it, and B. Scan every word you write, and ask yourself, "Am I saying the same thing over and over and over again?" If the answer is yes, it's time for a rewrite. Once you make a point or present an idea, move right along to the next one. If you must repeat yourself, find a new way to present an old idea. I mean, I found numerous examples of the exact same sentence just repeated in a different place. I would say it was lazy writing, but my feeling is more that it's just a young writer who's getting their style worked out. Don't give up though, because your idea was sound, and you obviously have a good heart. I will tell you what was told me time and again was I first started writing. Edit, edit, edit. Then find someone who will be brutally but kindly honest and have them edit too. It's good advice, and even after years of writing now and a formal education, I still follow it.
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