rate_review Reviews

This is horrible writing. I think thhat maybe you should take a few classes before posting again........it would defintaely spare the readers some pain. But, the idea was pretty good........I suppose.

Umm Wow, and not in a good way. For one thing its more like an rp then a story. For another well it needs to be betaed. And for a third thing its just bad... Writeing storys about two guys is cool if thats what you want to write. Don't write it just because your freind says its cool. and i must say that before you write anymore storys like this you need to well how do i say this kindly... Well Get a beta a proff reader and then read over it after there done with it. Cause right now its like a first draft. Try paragraphs and spaceing... along with spell check.
Yep and wow I'm sorry, Better luck next time.
-Meg

What the fuck?! You don't even know how to write!

suxed. sorry but
dont waste your time

I THINK U COULD OF MADE THAT BETTER ITS HELLA CORNY

UMMM, it was ok and all, but i have no idea y it was rated anything but PG, mayb PG-13 since little kids laugh at gay pplz, but if u write more chapters and put a more in-depth view about wat's goin on in the story and wat happens with Chandler and Dan (WHO R THEY??) then it could be better. but also it has almost nuthin 2 do with Lizzie and stuff, so IDK...
kk, but an idea 2 make it better would b sumthin like Chandler ends up really bein bio and all, and he goes with Dan at the sleep-over. then Lizzie does sum shit with hi, and that would B ok....... sry 2 let u kno that at the moment the story is sorta bad, but it DOES have potential......

k, i just wanted 2 say that u should actually have Lizzie find out cuz she hasn't found out so far, ans so she couldn't have reacted yet or nething!!!