rate_review Reviews

I love this pairing, and you wrote them well. Great job! The ending was so sweet I could taste it. And I enjoyed watching Goren's emotions get the better of him ;)

You need a beta... and fast. The idea is good hon but the content makes this work hard to read. With some help ya might do a good job.
Good luck.

I tried, I really did. I love the idea of Eames and Goren together (what female CI fan doesn't?) but the spelling errors, sentence fragments, etc., were just too distracting. I kept plugging along, and you did convey Bobby really well at the beginning; I could just see him in his tux (yummy!) and acting nervous and shy around Eames wearing an evening dress.... but I couldn't go on. I'd suggest you get a beta reader to go over it for you, or with you even; it's a GREAT concept, that's what caught my attention, the thought of him escorting her to her reunion.

One thing I liked: how he didn't go to his prom. I just recently watched an ep where Eames tells Bobby she was the prom queen at HER prom. The LOOK he gives her, I almost flipped! As any L&O viewer knows, they tend to shy away from anything romantic in that series, so just that little taste of Bobby's eyes lighting up for a second, and that secret smirk of his, spoke volumes for the series.

So please, work on it a bit more, because it's a great idea. Would love to check back and read it again.