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May 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Might I add a small critique to this story? I like it. It is very interesting although, I am not one for the rape/non-con fics. (Yes, I have written a few, myself).
I have been looking for a good M7 Western fic and have only found an updated plethora that I'm not fond of. I have both seasons and I love them, dearly. I came across your fic and managed to only get through half as it's late, right now, but I intend to finish in the morning. So, my critique is this:
There is an ability to be followed but, the scenes blend together which makes it sound like it's happening in the same room. Don't be afraid to separate the scenes or divide up the scenes as chapters. Your story is very commanding but it needs breaks.
Thank you. I've enjoyed reading it thus far. I will update when I've finished.
I have been looking for a good M7 Western fic and have only found an updated plethora that I'm not fond of. I have both seasons and I love them, dearly. I came across your fic and managed to only get through half as it's late, right now, but I intend to finish in the morning. So, my critique is this:
There is an ability to be followed but, the scenes blend together which makes it sound like it's happening in the same room. Don't be afraid to separate the scenes or divide up the scenes as chapters. Your story is very commanding but it needs breaks.
Thank you. I've enjoyed reading it thus far. I will update when I've finished.