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by susie41694

person Remetan
schedule September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay, as a short story, it's a good one; an excellent beginning into diving into the consciousness of Greg. I say, there are a few things that need work...some fragments that are meant to be sentences, some narrative disagreement - is it first or third person? But all in all.... pretty well done. I look forward to more from you.

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