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May 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG! What a crossover! That was awesome! More please!
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May 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. This is the kinda thing that, I'm not gonna lie, I love in fanfiction.
However, I do think that you need to do some work on the rate of your story. Its progressing much too quickly to.. make sense. Not to insult. Its just everything seems to happen within five minutes of each other, and it makes the story feel awkward.
Otherwise, I do like this story and hope to see more.
However, I do think that you need to do some work on the rate of your story. Its progressing much too quickly to.. make sense. Not to insult. Its just everything seems to happen within five minutes of each other, and it makes the story feel awkward.
Otherwise, I do like this story and hope to see more.
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May 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I love this. Pretty please continue it.