Reviews for Stuffed CanaryBy : MTL |
Part of what really drew me to this story was how it avoided the "Character X dominates and fucks their entire universe" trope. I mean, there's nothing wrong with that trope per se, but they stories quickly become formulaic and it was nice how the earlier stories really had everyone getting thier own turn getting stuffed. Sarah, Thea, Felicity and especially Nyssa's varying reactions/emotions dealing with thier turn on the recieving end were interesting and actually had some character beyond "character instantly melts into submission when buttfucked."
This is not to say I haven't enjoyed the expansion into the greater Arrowverse, but aside from sorting out the heirarchy beneath the core thruple, there really hasn't been any character development/exploration of the dynamic.
Personally, I'd love to see some of the core three back on the recieving end (Nyssa's never been airtight and I don't think has been penetrated in a dozen chapters.) It's been hinted at in the last two chapters and I hope that if we get another, that's the direction it should go.
Flying directly in the face of everything I just said...some post-crisis Supergirl/Batwoman action would be sweet.
I think your story is great. But I think you need a twist something no one sees coming. I have look at a lot of your writing and you tend to lead toward female dom a lot so switch up and write a Male dom to give yourself a real challenge. So like here is an example since you started with Arrow in your next few chapters switch to Sara's view and introduce her master who has been doing all this because he said so. that way you don't take away that she is in charge just that there is someone higher than her and only when she feels they are ready for him can they finally see him.
List of girls you can still do
Patty from Flash
Gypsy flash
Kara supergirl
Alex
and forget do some villains like huntress and summer glau character have them broken because they went against team arrow
Wow, I can only imagine how complicated this must be to write. I love the idea behind it, the poly web of relationships where there are different dynamics with some, and the introducing Iris and Linda even if just for the chapter is such a fun inclusions, but wow.
Admittedly being in awe of the technical writing behind it was not the reaction I expected to have, but had to mention it because it's kinda incredible.
One of the most fun premises I can think of, Sara and co going around, introducing various people to group sex, and then those people maybe or maybe not hanging around in some capacity...
It's great.
Great last chapter with Laurel getting involved. Loved Sara domming her.
Don't know where you will go with this story however, hope we at least get one chapter of an all girl gangbang of Nyssa that should end with a completely stuffed Nyssa (maybe taken all four of the other girls at the same time).
As usual I love your work and damn Thea is hot as fuck. I do wish in either this fanfic or a different one you had it more generic and focus on her. Sure, this fic is still hot but a bit predictabe due to the common theme of everyone getting stuffed. Hot, but Thea is one of my favorite characters and I want to see her in the BDSM relationship more so than she is shown in this.
Love the addition of Thea. Not enough stories with her.
Wouldn't mind Laurel being added to the mix. Or maybe even Supergirl
However, if you do anymore with this story we need to have Nyssa sub again. Not enough stories with her subbing.
Could you please do a Percy Jackson story where Annabeth is sodimized by Thalia and Piper or two other girls or even a gangbang?
Awesome scene! Now they just have to add Laurel into the mix.
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